Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

A given table shows change in export earning from 2015 t0 2016 . Overall in 2015 petroleum products earning rise in 2015 upto 60 percent but in 2016 textiles export slightly fall upto 40 percent .On the other side agricultural products go below 0.81 which is 40 percent compare to gems and jewellery which are more upto 5.18 percent in 2015 to 2016 this means in these two groups face fall in these two years , petroleum products change upto 8.5 while textiles go above upto 15,24 in 2016 . IN 2015 petroleum products changed 3 percent in 2015 which make thwm earn little bit but textile it's customer percentage maybe be low but earning is more than above . Same in case of gems and jewellery it have earned more in export than agricultural products which are less upto 0.18 which make loss for people for earning . most lowest amount was engenineered goods which give profit of 3 percent only In coclusion pertroleum products give less profit but textiles give more which give benifit .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response attempts to compare export categories and includes a concluding statement, but it does not accurately summarise the main features of the chart. Several figures and trends are misread: textiles rose from about $26 billion to $31 billion, rather than falling to $40 billion, and agricultural exports were roughly stable at $31 billion, not below 0.81. The percentage changes are also assigned to the wrong categories in places; for example, 8.5% belongs to engineered goods, not petroleum products. The overview is therefore unclear and sometimes contradicts the data. To strengthen the response, identify the broad pattern accurately—most categories increased, gems and jewellery declined, and textiles had the largest percentage rise—then support it with a few correct comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to organise the response with an opening, an overview beginning “Overall,” and a conclusion. However, ideas do not progress in a clear sequence: the discussion moves between categories, percentages and earnings without a consistent comparison, and some statements contradict earlier ones. Linking phrases such as “On the other side” and “Same in case” do not make the relationships between points clear. The long middle section also combines several claims in sentences that are difficult to follow. A clearer structure would be to give an accurate overview first, then compare the higher-value categories and the lower-value categories in separate paragraphs, using one comparison at a time.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “export,” “earning,” “percentage,” “profit” and “loss,” and attempts to describe change with phrases such as “rise” and “fall.” However, word choice is often inaccurate or repetitive, and this sometimes obscures the intended meaning. For example, “petroleum products change” is unclear, while “profit” and “loss” are not appropriate descriptions of export values in this chart. There are also spelling errors, including “pertroleum,” “engenineered” and “coclusion.” Build a more precise range of chart language, such as “export value,” “increased,” “declined,” “remained stable” and “accounted for,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, including a concluding sentence and clauses linked with “which” and “but.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, tense, agreement and punctuation frequently make the comparisons hard to understand. For instance, “agricultural products go below 0.81 which is 40 percent compare to gems” lacks a clear grammatical relationship, while “it have earned” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. Several sentences run together, with inconsistent capitalisation and missing punctuation. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences first, then combine them accurately—for example, state the 2015 and 2016 values and use a clear verb such as “rose,” “fell” or “remained.”

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