Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The provided bar graph illustrates the value of export products such as petrolum products, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural products and textiles of a country between 2015 and 2016. The provided table compares the fluctuation in these export groups in both years.

Overall, all the export comparetively increased in 2016 except gems and jewellery. Textile percentage dominates in whereas, gem and jewellery dropped.

Commence from, petroleum products, In 2015 they were 60% and it went upward in 2015 at more than 60%. Subsequently, engineered products were at above 50%, however it surhed to 60% in 2016. Agriculturel products showed minor grew in 2016. Furthermore, textile climbed markedly from more than 30% to 40%. In contrast, gems and jewellery declined above 50% to just 50%.

Turning towards table, textile percentage surged by

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the main categories and recognise that gems and jewellery declined, while textiles rose notably. However, the response reports several figures inaccurately or unclearly: the chart is in billions of dollars, not percentages, and textiles rose from about $26 billion to $31 billion, not to $40 billion. The overview’s claim that all categories increased except gems is also questionable because agricultural exports were approximately unchanged, despite the table showing a very small percentage rise. Most importantly, the table discussion stops mid-sentence, so its key comparisons are not reported. The response addresses the task only minimally, and it is also 17 words below the required minimum. Include a complete overview and accurate comparisons for both visuals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs about the chart and table. The sequence from the bar chart to the table is signalled by “Turning towards table,” and “In contrast” helps mark a comparison. However, progression is difficult to follow because several statements are vague or contradictory, such as “all the export comparetively increased” followed by the unclear description of agricultural products. The final sentence, “textile percentage surged by,” is unfinished, leaving the response without a complete ending or a clear account of the table. Use one paragraph for the overview, group related chart comparisons logically, and complete the table summary with clear linking and reference.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “declined,” “climbed markedly,” “surged,” and “in contrast,” which helps communicate broad trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear: “export comparetively increased,” “Textile percentage dominates in,” and “Commence from” do not express the intended meaning naturally. Spelling errors such as “petrolum,” “surhed,” and “Agriculturel” also reduce precision. In addition, “60%” and “more than 30% to 40%” misuse percentage language for values shown in billions of dollars. Build a more accurate set of trend phrases and use the chart’s units consistently, for example, “export value” and “rose from approximately $26 billion to $31 billion.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, including “Overall, all the export comparetively increased in 2016 except gems and jewellery” and a contrast clause beginning “however.” There is also some control of simple past forms, as in “declined.” However, sentence structures are often incomplete or faulty, and these errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. “In 2015 they were 60% and it went upward in 2015 at more than 60%” has unclear pronoun reference and repeats the year; “Agriculturel products showed minor grew” has an incorrect grammatical form; and the final phrase “textile percentage surged by” is unfinished. Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms, sentence boundaries, and punctuation, and proofread each sentence for completeness.

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