Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given bar graph illustrates the nation's export earnings in various categories. While, the table depicts the percentage change in values of exports.

From an overall analysis, it is evident that the petroleum products were accounted for largest proportion whereas, the textiles had the lowest proportion of export earnings.

To expound the bar graph in detail, the petroleum products were stood at 60 billions in 2015 but in 2016 it gradually increased upto 62 billions. In addition, earnings from engineered goods was at 55 billions in 2015 and it significantly rose up in 2016 about 60 billions. However, 50 billions of earnings were exported by gems and jewellery thus it experienced small decline in 2016 nearly 48 billions. Furthermore, an agricultural products had similar values in both 2015 and 2016 below 40 billions.

As further scrutiny reveals, the table shows the percentage changes in values of each categories. The petroleum products were changed only 3% but the engineered goods had changed a lot around 8.5%. Probing ahead, the least change was shown in an agricultural products nearby 0.81% and 5.18% by gems and jewellery.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main categories and include several relevant comparisons, such as petroleum products being the largest export and textiles having the lowest earnings in 2015. However, the overview is incomplete: it does not mention the notable rise in textiles or that gems and jewellery declined. Several figures are also inaccurate: for example, gems and jewellery were about $43 billion in 2015 and $41 billion in 2016, not $50 billion and $48 billion; engineered goods were about $57 billion and $62 billion, rather than $55 billion and $60 billion. The table’s textile change of 15.24% is omitted. To strengthen the response, give a more complete overview and report the key figures and changes accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph describing the bar chart, and a final paragraph on the table. This makes the information easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “In addition,” “However,” and “Furthermore” help connect comparisons, although some transitions feel formulaic, and “Probing ahead” does not clearly signal a new comparison. The final paragraph also leaves the textile percentage change unreported, so the coverage feels unfinished. For stronger progression, group the main increases and decreases together, then summarise the table’s changes in a consistent order. Ensure each linking phrase expresses the relationship between the figures that follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “export earnings,” “percentage change,” “decline,” and “similar values,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “From an overall analysis” and “As further scrutiny reveals,” but these expressions sound unnatural or overly elaborate in this context. Some collocations are inaccurate, including “earnings were exported” and “the petroleum products were changed.” Use direct, precise language to describe the data, such as “export earnings from petroleum products rose” or “the value of textiles increased.” More accurate category terms and natural collocations would make the report clearer and more controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, and most of the intended comparisons remain understandable. However, some grammatical errors recur. For example, “the petroleum products were stood at” uses an incorrect verb form, while “an agricultural products” has an article and plural mismatch. The opening “While, the table depicts…” is an incomplete clause, and commas are sometimes placed incorrectly after introductory or linking expressions. There are also problems with countable forms and sentence construction in phrases such as “each categories.” Review verb patterns, articles, singular and plural agreement, and punctuation around subordinate clauses. More consistently accurate sentence structures would help you express the comparisons with greater clarity.

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