Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the bar chart show about of export earing between 2015and 2016 and below the bar chart there are the some percentage about gems and jewellery, agircurlture products, textiles some how first discuss bar chat and then we go to percentages

firstly, in bar chat there are some products petroleum, enguneres goods, gems and jewellery, agircultrue product , textile and having some value from 10 to 70 and the highest is pertoleum porducts is 6and 7, as well as in the year of 2015 and 2016 and the lowest. is textiles is about of 38 in the year of 2015 and 40 in 2016 and in middle is engineers goods is about 4 and 6 between 2015 and 2016 as well as in gems and jewellrys and agricultural products. 50 and 48 in gems and jewellery and 40 and 41 in agricultural products

secondly, in percentage is petroleum is 3% and engineered goods 8.5%,gems and jewellery is 5.18% and agricultural and products is 0.81,and lastly textiles 15.24%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two years and mention all five export categories, and you include the percentage figures, so the response is recognisably about the task. However, the main chart is reported inaccurately: for example, petroleum is described as “6and 7” rather than about $61 billion and $63 billion, while textiles are given as 38 and 40 instead of about 26 and 31. Gems and agricultural products are also substantially misreported. The overview is missing: you do not clearly summarise the overall pattern, such as textiles having the largest percentage rise and gems being the only category to fall. The percentage list is mostly accurate, but the chart details and comparisons need to be selected and reported more reliably.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: you separate the chart discussion from the percentage information with “firstly” and “secondly,” and the categories are generally presented in a recognisable sequence. This gives the reader a broad sense of how the response is arranged. However, the progression within the first paragraph is difficult to follow: “and the lowest. is textiles” is disconnected, and the figures for several categories are compressed into a confusing final sentence. The opening also announces a plan rather than giving a clear overview. Use distinct paragraphs for an overview and the key details, and group categories by trend or size. Linking words should clarify relationships, not simply mark the next section.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “export,” “percentage,” “petroleum products,” and “gems and jewellery,” and you attempt to describe rankings with “highest,” “lowest,” and “middle.” This shows a basic range relevant to the chart. However, spelling errors are frequent and sometimes make category names difficult to recognise, such as “earing,” “agircurlture,” “enguneres,” and “porducts.” Several phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, including “some percentage about” and “having some value.” Use standard chart language such as “export earnings,” “rose to,” “fell to,” and “accounted for.” Check the spelling of the labels and choose precise verbs for changes and comparisons.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas using phrases such as “as well as” and “between 2015 and 2016,” but most sentences rely on simple structures, and control is inconsistent. The opening, “the bar chart show about of export earing,” lacks a clear grammatical structure; “the highest is pertoleum” also has an unclear comparison pattern. There are problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “the lowest. is textiles,” while the long sentence beginning “firstly” joins several ideas without clear punctuation. These errors sometimes make the relationships between figures difficult to understand. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then practise accurate comparative forms such as “Petroleum earnings rose from … to …”.

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