Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
below illustrates the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
In 2015 the petroleum products ration is 70% however the percentage of petroleum products in 2016 is 72% this year ratio is above then last year. In 2015 the engineered goods precentage is 65% moreover in 2016 the ratio of engineered goods is 71% this year ratio is increase han last year. In 2015 the ;gems and jewellery ratio is 51% and in 2016 the ratio of germs and jewellery is 50%. In 2015 the percentage of agricultural products is 40% but in 2016 the ratio of agriculture products is 41%. In 2015 the percentage of textiles is 32% and in 2016 the ratio of textiles is 41%. this year ratio is raised than last year ratio.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response identifies all five export categories and attempts to compare 2015 with 2016, but it does not provide a clear overview of the main features. Several figures are substantially inaccurate: for example, petroleum is reported as 70% and 72%, whereas the chart gives approximately $61 billion and $63 billion; engineered goods are also given as 65% and 71%, rather than about $57 billion and $62 billion. The response also describes values as percentages, confusing the chart’s dollar amounts with the table’s percentage changes. It is 119 words, below the 150-word minimum, and 30 words copied from the prompt were excluded from that count. Add an accurate overview and select key comparisons using the correct units.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response follows the categories in a consistent order, which gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, it is presented as one paragraph, with no clear separation between an overview and supporting details. Repeated openings such as “In 2015…” and “in 2016…” make the account mechanical, while links such as “moreover” do not express the comparison accurately. The final sentence repeats the claim that the figures rose without specifying which categories it refers to. Organise the report into an introduction, a brief overview, and grouped comparisons; use concise linking language to show increases, decreases, and stability.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses relevant category names, including “petroleum products,” “engineered goods,” and “agricultural products,” so the reader can identify the subjects being compared. However, vocabulary for describing data is limited and repetitive: “ratio” and “percentage” are repeatedly used where the chart reports export values in billions of dollars. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “precentage,” “germs” for “gems,” and “han” for “than.” Phrases such as “this year ratio is above then last year” are not natural ways to describe a change. Build a small range of accurate reporting expressions, such as “stood at,” “rose to,” and “declined slightly,” and check spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
Most sentences use a basic comparison pattern, often beginning “In 2015…” and joining information with “and” or “but.” This shows some ability to form simple clauses, but the range is narrow and errors recur. For example, “this year ratio is above then last year” has problems with the verb phrase and comparative construction, while “this year ratio is increase han last year” does not form a grammatical clause. Capitalisation is also inconsistent: “this year” begins a sentence in lowercase, and punctuation around “;gems” is faulty. Practise accurate comparative structures such as “the figure rose from X to Y” and “it was lower in 2016,” then proofread sentence boundaries and verb forms.
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