Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart compare the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016 and the table charts the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2016.

It is also clear that inthe table chart in the highest billiions export earnings in the petroleum products while, inthe large number of billions in agricultural prolducts and textiles and in the table chart in hiughest percentage in textiles and the lowest percentage in agricyultural products.

In trams of the table chart the highest billion in various categories during in 2015 and 2016 on the poetroleum in 65% to 60% and the lowewst in theh textiles in 35% to 42%. In thge Engineer goods in during 2015 and 2016 in 55% and 60 respectievly.

Regarding that, Inthe highst percentage on the textiles in 15.24% and the same time inthe lowest percentage agriculture in 0.81%. Gems and jewellery in 5.18% and Engineered good in 8.5%. While, at the same time Petroleum products in 3%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and mention several relevant features, including petroleum products as the leading export category and textiles as having the largest percentage change. However, the overview is unclear and some comparisons are inaccurate: the chart shows petroleum at about $61–63 billion, not “65% to 60%,” and textiles at about $26–31 billion, not “35% to 42%.” The table’s percentage figures are mostly reported correctly, but the response does not clearly summarise the main changes across the categories. The required minimum of 150 words is not met; the response is 147 words, with copied prompt wording excluded. To improve, give a concise, accurate overview and compare the key rises and fall using the chart’s units.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into paragraphs, and phrases such as “In terms of” and “Regarding that” signal a move between points. However, the ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: the second paragraph mixes an overview with category rankings, while the third gives figures that are difficult to interpret and does not connect them clearly to the table. The final paragraph lists percentages without explaining how they relate to the bar-chart values. Repeated use of “in the table chart” and “at the same time” also makes the linking mechanical rather than helpful. A clearer structure would be an introduction, an overview of the main trends, then a paragraph comparing the bar-chart figures and one reporting the percentage changes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “exports,” “percentage,” “petroleum products,” and “Gems and jewellery,” so the reader can recognise the topic. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled expressions make the report difficult to follow, such as “billiions export earnings,” “the highest billion,” and “theh textiles.” “Table chart” is repeated and is not a natural way to distinguish the table from the bar chart. Some category names are also inconsistently expressed, for example “Engineer goods” and “Engineered good.” Use precise terms such as “export value,” “rose,” “fell,” and “percentage change,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and uses basic comparison patterns, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently obscure the intended meaning. For example, “The bar chart compare” has subject–verb disagreement, while “during 2015 and 2016 compared with 2016” gives an incorrect comparison period. The sentence beginning “In terms of the table chart” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and phrases such as “in 65% to 60%” do not form a clear comparison. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent. Build accurate simple sentences first—for example, “Petroleum exports rose from about $61 billion to $63 billion”—then add a limited number of correctly formed complex sentences to show range.

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