Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This line chart illustrates the comparison between products which earned exports in 2015 to 2016.

Petroleum and engineering goods earned higher while Gems and Jewellery earned less than first two products, Moreover Agriculture and Textiles earning was less than all other proportion of products.

Petroleum products earned a lot of money in exports as in the chart mentions, these production was on peak in 2015 to 2016.Engineering goods played the same role in exports which was eqaul to petroleum.The chart shows that the export production was 60 billion dollars to 70 billions dollars which was most higher proportion in all products.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies a few broad comparisons, including that petroleum and engineered goods were the leading categories and that gems and jewellery earned less than those two. However, it does not provide a clear overview of the main changes, and several claims are inaccurate or unclear: engineered goods did not earn the same amount as petroleum, and the statement that exports were “60 billion dollars to 70 billions dollars” does not match the chart’s approximate values. Agricultural products and textiles are mentioned but not compared with figures or trends. The response is also 49 words below the required minimum, leaving the task substantially under-reported. To improve, summarise the overall pattern and support it with accurate figures and key changes, especially the rise in textiles and the fall in gems and jewellery.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by comments on the leading categories and then a further description of petroleum and engineered goods. This gives the reader some sense of topic, but the progression is limited and the ideas are not developed into a clear report. The second sentence combines several comparisons with “Moreover,” while the final paragraph repeats the point that the first two categories were high rather than moving through the remaining data. Punctuation also makes the links difficult to follow, particularly the comma splice after “first two products” and the run-together sentence after “2016.” Use separate paragraphs for an overview and supporting details, and connect comparisons in a more orderly sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, such as “exports,” “Petroleum products,” “Engineering goods,” and “proportion,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are unnatural or imprecise. “Products which earned exports” does not clearly express export earnings, and “earned a lot of money” is informal and vague for an academic report. “Production was on peak” and “most higher proportion” also make the intended meaning harder to understand. Aim for precise chart language such as “export earnings,” “recorded the highest value,” and “accounted for a smaller share,” while using the category names consistently. Check spelling as well, including “equal” rather than “eqaul.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and joined sentence forms, for example using “while” to contrast categories and “Moreover” to add information. However, control is uneven, and errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes obscure the comparisons. In “Petroleum and engineering goods earned higher,” the comparative structure is incomplete; “Agriculture and Textiles earning was less” has an awkward subject–verb pattern; and “these production was” shows an agreement problem. The sentence beginning “The chart shows that” also uses an unclear range construction. Several sentences run together or are joined with commas where a full stop is needed. Practise accurate comparative clauses and use shorter, complete sentences before attempting more complex structures.

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