Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar graph illustrate one of country's expotrs in different categories between 2015 and 2016. The bar shows percentage changed in each category in 2016 compared with 2015 in exportation.
The pertoleum products skyrocketed upto 65 billions rather then other products , and its slip backed in textiles nearly 38billions.Agricultural products growth is same 40billions
In the year 2015 the rose in all products upto 40millions of dollors ,mainly petroleum products surge 60millions of dollors in engineered good is three prencentage ,
gems and jewellerys growth in 2016 upto 8.5 percentage whic its helped in petroleum products
Agricultural products as made steady growth in 2016 upto 0.81 percentage , in addition the textiles products showed dramatically in 2016 compared to 2015 upto 15.24 percentage .rather then petroleum this product showed the significant growth.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response attempts to describe the chart and table, but it does not provide a clear, accurate overview of the main features. Several figures and trends are misreported: petroleum exports were about $61–63 billion, not $65 billion; textiles were about $26–31 billion, not $38 billion; and agricultural exports were about $31 billion, not $40 billion. The percentage changes are also confused: 8.5% belongs to engineered goods, while gems and jewellery fell by about 5.18%. The statement that all products rose is inaccurate, since gems declined and agriculture was nearly unchanged. The response is 17 words below the required minimum. To improve, select the largest and smallest values, identify the main increases and the one decline, and support these points with accurate comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
There is some paragraphing, and the response makes an attempt to move from a general introduction to category details. However, the ideas do not form a clear progression: the second paragraph gives several figures without explaining their relationship, and the later paragraphs repeat or contradict earlier claims. For example, textiles are described as having “slip backed” to nearly 38 billion, then as showing the most significant growth, without a clear distinction between value and percentage change. Linking phrases such as “in addition” and “rather then” are present, but they do not reliably clarify the relationships between points. Organise the response around an overview followed by accurate comparisons, and use references and connectors to show whether each figure is a value or a percentage change.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response attempts a range of chart-related vocabulary, including “surge,” “steady growth,” “significant growth,” and “compared to,” which shows an effort to describe change rather than simply list figures. However, inaccurate word choice and spelling often make the meaning difficult to follow. “Skyrocketed” overstates the small rise in petroleum exports, while “slip backed” is unclear for the decline in gems and jewellery. Forms such as “expotrs,” “pertoleum,” “dollors,” and “jewellerys” also reduce precision. Some expressions, including “growth is same,” are not natural collocations. Use neutral, precise terms such as “rose slightly,” “remained stable,” and “declined,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response includes attempts at longer sentences and subordinate clauses, for example, “in addition the textiles products showed dramatically in 2016 compared to 2015,” but control is inconsistent. Subject–verb agreement is faulty in “The bar graph illustrate,” and sentence boundaries and punctuation are often unclear, particularly in the long third paragraph. Articles and plural forms are also unreliable, as in “in engineered good” and “textiles products.” These errors sometimes make it hard to identify which category or year a statement refers to. Build accuracy first with clear simple comparisons, then add controlled complex structures using clauses such as “while” or “whereas.” Check agreement, articles, plurals, and punctuation when editing.
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