Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar demonstratesthe value of one nation exports in various categories over one year during 2015 and 2016. and the table illustrates the proportion category of exports form 2016 to 2015

Overall, it is clear that the petroleum products had signaficantly increased while the second highest the engineered goods. Whereas the textiles had the lowest over the peroid

Looking first it the figures the petroleum products had increased 65 billion $ in and 2015 while in and 2016 the petroleum increased 65 billion $ simalrly the engineered goods during 2015 and 2016 apporaximently 60 billion$ and whereas the gems amnd jewellery had increased 51 billion$ in and 2015 while in 2016 the jewellery declind to 49 billion $.

Turing to the agricultural products had 41 billion in 2015 and 2016 addionationly the textiles increased 33 bill

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the topic and attempt an overview, noting petroleum products and engineered goods as leading categories and textiles as the lowest. However, the overview is inaccurate: petroleum was not the category with the largest increase, and textiles were not the lowest in 2016. Several figures are substantially misreported: petroleum was about $61 billion in 2015 and $63 billion in 2016, not $65 billion in both years; gems and jewellery fell from about $43 billion to $41 billion, not $51 billion to $49 billion. The agricultural figures are also misstated, and the final sentence is incomplete. The response therefore addresses the task only partially, with limited and under-developed reporting. It is also 14 words below the required minimum. Check the chart carefully and report the main trends accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and a paragraph of figures. Phrases such as “Overall” and “Looking first” signal a change in focus, and the categories are discussed in a broadly understandable order. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview is unclear and the final paragraph ends abruptly at “the textiles increased 33 bill”. Some linking is awkward or inaccurate, as in “Whereas” beginning a fragment and “Turing to” introducing an incomplete clause. The repeated use of “and” also makes relationships between figures hard to track. Use complete paragraphs and sentences, and group the categories by trend—for example, increases, decreases and little change—to make comparisons clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “exports”, “categories”, “increased”, “declined” and “billion”, so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the report less clear, such as “signaficantly”, “pero[id]”, “simalrly”, “apporaximently” and “addionationly”. Phrases such as “the proportion category of exports” and “the petroleum increased” are also unnatural or imprecise. Aim for accurate collocations such as “export earnings”, “the value of petroleum exports” and “rose by”. Check spelling carefully, and use “approximately” only when describing an estimated figure rather than as a substitute for a clear comparison.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a contrast with “while” and “whereas”. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure and punctuation often make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “The bar demonstratesthe value…” has missing spacing and an incomplete opening structure, while “Looking first it the figures the petroleum products had increased 65 billion $ in and 2015” contains several misplaced elements. The final clause, “the textiles increased 33 bill”, is unfinished. Tense and sentence patterns also need attention: use forms such as “rose from $61 billion in 2015 to $63 billion in 2016”. Practise writing complete, clearly punctuated sentences before adding complex contrasts.

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