Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

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last fifty years most of womens change their life most of women geeting education most of the women speak fir their self most ofwomen raise their voice most of women do job the position of women also change in these ladt fifty years most of women speake about voilence domestic most of women job most of the women working for their life most of the women do their own bussiness the enjoy the life they have opportunity to speak about harrassment rape case they donot silence remain in last fifty years and i agree with gender equal becaus our contury and family need to give same rule men and women if women want live their life single they have a right if women want to live nuckear family they have if women not want to live with joint family so they need to sepearate but they have a right to meet their in law twice a month

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You take a position by saying “i agree with gender equal” and give relevant examples of change, including women gaining education, speaking up, working, and starting businesses. These points show awareness of the topic, but the response only partly addresses the question: it does not explain clearly why these changes still fall short of equality, and the final comments about family arrangements are not connected to a developed argument. Most ideas are listed rather than explained or supported with specific examples. The response is also 90 words below the required minimum, which leaves too little space to develop your reasons. To strengthen the answer, state whether you agree or disagree with the claim and explain two or three reasons with examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

The response contains several relevant points, and the repeated references to women’s education, work, and speaking up give it a basic topic focus. However, these ideas appear in one long, largely unpunctuated sequence, so the reader cannot easily see where one reason ends and another begins. Repetition of “most of women” also makes the progression feel like a list rather than a connected argument. The shift to rights concerning single or joint families is abrupt and is not linked to the earlier points. Use separate paragraphs for your position, reasons, and conclusion, and connect each example to the claim that equality has not yet been achieved. Simple linking phrases such as “For example” and “However” would help clarify relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “education,” “domestic” violence, “business,” “harassment,” and “rape,” which helps communicate the subject. There are also attempts to express relevant concepts such as women “raise their voice” and “do their own business.” However, the vocabulary is repetitive and several phrases are inaccurate or unclear, including “most of womens change their life,” “speak fir their self,” and “they donot silence remain.” Spelling errors such as “voilence,” “bussiness,” and “harrassment” also reduce precision. Build a more accurate range of collocations for discussing equality, rights, employment, and discrimination, and check spelling before submitting. This will make your ideas easier to understand and more appropriate for an academic essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to communicate several ideas in connected sentences, and the response includes simple statements about education, work, and women’s rights. However, sentence boundaries and punctuation are largely missing, making many clauses run together. There are frequent problems with verb forms and agreement, as in “most of women change their life” and “most of women working for their life,” as well as incomplete or unclear structures such as “if women want to live nuckear family they have.” Articles, plurals, and pronouns also need more consistent control. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, then combine related ideas with accurate conjunctions. For example: “Many women now work, but they still face unequal treatment.”

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