Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Most of the societies are still not claiming gender equality, while in the last 50 years women has contributed well to the societies by performing different types of jobs.

Overall, I strongly agree that women have a great contribution to societies by means of performing different jobs at job sectors and helping the other women to solve there problems. But these scoieties have still not claimed that they have achieved gender equality.

Initially, females have palyed a beneficial role in many cultures, because of there academic knowledge. For example, most of the females are teaching in the schools through their hardwork from last 50 years. Moreover, they are also performing different types of jobs, such as working in NADRA sector and in hospitals. Like, nurses are doing their job in th hospital and some are working in NADRA sectors, providing tokens to individuals and processing their ID cards.

Subsequently, womens having skills are promoting the uneduacted and less experience females to build their future, such as the womens who are sewing clothes are helping their colleagues to learn this skill. Also, Female doctors provide the opportunities to nurses in operation theatre to get experience from them and learn how to perform an operation. But, on the other side, these societies are not approving that they have achieved gender equality.

In a nuttshell, womens are palying an important role in building and shaping a society. The main reason is they are doing several types of jobs in different sectors to build their future from last 50 years. On the otherside, these societies are not approaching gender equality.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position by saying you “strongly agree,” and you give relevant examples of women working in education, hospitals and other sectors. However, the response only partly addresses the central claim: the question asks why societies still cannot claim gender equality, but most of your discussion describes women’s contributions rather than explaining continuing inequalities. The point that societies have “still not claimed” equality is repeated, but not supported with reasons such as unequal pay, limited leadership opportunities or unequal responsibilities at home. Some examples, including women teaching and helping others learn sewing, are also asserted rather than clearly linked to equality. Develop a consistent argument about both progress and the barriers that remain, and explain how each example supports your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Initially,” “Subsequently” and “In a nutshell” help show paragraph roles. However, progression is limited because the body paragraphs largely repeat the idea that women work and contribute, while the central issue of why equality has not been achieved is not developed. Some linking is mechanical or awkward: “But, on the other side” introduces a contrast without explaining it, and “Overall” is followed by a restatement rather than a clear overview of the argument. References such as “these societies” are also vague. Organise each body paragraph around a distinct reason, then use linking phrases to show how the evidence supports that reason.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “gender equality,” “academic knowledge,” “operation theatre” and “sectors,” so the reader can follow the general subject. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the intended meaning less clear. For example, “claiming gender equality” and “approaching gender equality” do not express the idea of achieving or recognising equality naturally; “womens” and “there problems” also show spelling or word-form problems. Repeated use of “different types of jobs” and “performing” makes the discussion sound repetitive. Build a more precise set of expressions for equality and inequality, and check spelling and collocations carefully. More accurate topic vocabulary would help you explain the argument rather than simply list occupations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including examples introduced with “because” and “such as,” but the range is limited and complex sentences are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms occur in “women has contributed” and “womens having skills,” while “most of the females are teaching … from last 50 years” has problems with tense and time expression. Articles and sentence construction are also inconsistent, as in “in th hospital” and “Like, nurses are doing their job in the hospital and some are working…”. These errors recur and can make the reader pause, even though the overall meaning is usually recoverable. Practise accurate present-perfect forms for changes over time, subject–verb agreement, and complete sentence patterns; then proofread each sentence for articles and punctuation.

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