Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I am diagree with this statement The position of the women is changed dusring the years from 50th because past many years ago their is no equality and fear about womans .As well as,their is much different between the gender like many centuries ago in 19s people buried alive woman in the grave because they think that girls do not have right to live they only here to spend money on then.

On the one hand,many uneducated people believe that they have to spent money of the woman is waste of time because when woman get married parents have to send dowlry to their in -laws also their education expanse thats why their is no respect of the woman in the country,Furthermore,societies did not accept the devorce woman or single mother .The reason is that people things that the woman with divorce is have not good character or she did something wrong that is why they divorced.Although , the woman with children are taunt with that she did not make her husband happy that why her husband left her.

On the other hand , nowadays in the 20s centuary woman are called by respect because in 20s both male and female are seen by one way of eyes because now womans are highly educated .another reason is that they are working like a male which womans didnot need anyone to support them

In my conclusion,womans are the one who support themself and also they make therm strong to face the world in any situation because they do not want to be boden on the other like parents,husbands.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position by opening with disagreement and discuss changes in women’s status, including education and employment, alongside continuing discrimination against divorced women and single mothers. These points are relevant, but the response only partly answers whether societies have achieved gender equality: the conclusion says women can support themselves, yet does not clearly explain whether this proves equality or identify what inequalities remain. Several claims, such as the historical example and the idea that men and women are now viewed equally, are asserted without clear explanation or support. Develop two or three central reasons with specific examples, and keep your position consistent by distinguishing progress from full equality.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This gives the reader some guidance. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the first body paragraph combines dowry, education costs, divorce, and social judgement without clearly linking each point to the main argument. Connectors such as “Furthermore” and “Although” are sometimes used awkwardly, and the conclusion introduces ideas about supporting oneself that have not been fully developed. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, explain it in sequence, and use clear references and transitions to show how each example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “gender equality,” “highly educated,” “single mother,” and “support themself.” These choices show an effort to discuss social change and discrimination. However, the range is limited and many spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, for example “dowlry,” “devorce,” “taunt,” and “boden.” Some phrases are also imprecise, such as “one way of eyes” and “working like a male.” Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and natural word combinations. Prefer precise expressions such as “equal treatment,” “financially independent,” and “face social stigma” where they fit your meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “when,” and “that,” so there is some variety. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence boundaries, verb forms, agreement, articles, and plurals can make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “The position of the women is changed” has an incorrect tense and article pattern, while “people things that the woman with divorce is have not good character” contains several structural problems. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, especially where sentences run together. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine them with one subordinate clause at a time; proofread each sentence for subject–verb agreement and tense.

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