Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The status of women have changed in many societies over the past fifty years however, they continue face gender inequality. I completely agree with this view because women face unequal opportunity in education and employment.

One of the main reason why I agree with this statement because women have made significant progress in many areas. More women are educated and perform their duties in both home and financial. But they treated unequally, For example in 2017 the parliament of India raised the number to women legislative number from 11% to 33%.

In modern world women women perform multiple task. They do both household duties and play important role in employment by doing jobs. But they receive fewer opportunity on job. They face unequal pay. For instance, in some workplaces women may earn less than men in similar work and have less opportunities for better position.

In conclusion, Women work a lot to improve their condition in societies but they still face problems in gender inequality. Women perform works in house and office but they have less opportunities to reach senior positions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you completely agree that women’s progress has not produced equality. You address education, employment, pay, and representation, and the examples about women’s household and paid work and India’s parliament are relevant. However, the response only partially develops the task: education is mentioned in the opening but not explained in the body, and the parliamentary example is difficult to interpret because the change is not clearly described or linked to equality. The employment paragraph gives a useful example of unequal pay, but needs explanation or evidence. The response is also below the required 250 words, which limits how fully you can develop your reasons. Add a developed example and explain how each point demonstrates continuing inequality.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The ideas generally follow a sensible order, moving from progress and representation to work and pay, and phrases such as “For example” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages. However, progression within paragraphs is limited: the first body paragraph moves from education and duties to parliamentary representation without clearly connecting these points. The conclusion largely repeats the introduction and body rather than drawing the argument together. Some linking is also mechanical, and the repeated “But” contrast does not always show precisely how ideas relate. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main claim, then explain and connect the supporting example to it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant set of terms for the topic, including “gender inequality,” “unequal pay,” “employment,” and “senior positions,” so the main ideas are understandable. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “legislative” and “financial.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, which makes parts of the argument less clear: “perform their duties in both home and financial,” “women legislative number,” and “fewer opportunity on job.” Repetition of “women,” “work,” and “opportunity” also reduces variety. Build a bank of accurate collocations for education, representation, and employment, and check whether a phrase sounds natural in context. For example, use “opportunities for promotion” rather than “opportunities for better position.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate your main position using mostly simple sentence patterns, and you attempt some longer structures, such as “For instance, in some workplaces women may earn less than men in similar work.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make several sentences awkward or difficult to follow. Examples include “The status of women have changed” (subject–verb agreement), “they continue face” (missing infinitive marker), and “One of the main reason why I agree… because” (number agreement and faulty clause structure). There are also problems with articles and plurals, as in “play important role” and “multiple task,” as well as punctuation and capitalisation. Practise accurate complex sentences using “because,” “although,” and “while,” and proofread each sentence for agreement, articles, and complete verb forms.

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