Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Through the position of the women has a well deal in today's society over last decade, but then also not achieved a full percentage of gender equality.

In the earlier time there is a too many rules and regulation in the society. That ladies didn't have their freedom in their life they have only one task to do is given a birth a baby, do household work, even can't go outside of the home. Their life is like as a criminal locked in the jail. I think the criminal also enjoys better than this type of women.

However, in today's time it was fully changed. Now women have their own freedom, they can make their own decision and they do not have to look or wait for others guide or help. In present time they stand beside the men and in many sectors of the workplace they participate and competing against mans. In many high sectors of the governments work they are seating and ruling the country even a prime minister and also in a defense. But then also we can't achieve the gender equality fully. In this era there also a some restriction on them. some parent and the men are keep the past mentality. That the women can't work, can not go outside etc. Like as the previous era mentality.

On balance, I firmly believe that, in future we will achieve the full percentage of the the gender equality. and Both gender will work stand beside and make the world glory.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the central issue and take a broadly clear position: women’s circumstances have improved, but equality has not yet been fully achieved. The examples of women entering workplaces, government and defence are relevant, and you acknowledge continuing restrictions and traditional attitudes. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The opening refers to change “over last decade,” although the prompt concerns a much longer period, and the conclusion predicts future equality without explaining why this outcome is likely. Develop the reasons behind the remaining inequality—for example, unequal pay, leadership opportunities or expectations around care work—and support them with a specific example. This would make your response to the question more complete and your position more consistently explained.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

Your response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph about the past, a contrast with the present, and a concluding view. Connectors such as “However” and “On balance” help signal the main shifts. At times, though, progression is repetitive or unclear. The present-day paragraph moves from freedom to employment, government and then parental attitudes without clearly grouping or explaining these points. Some links, including “But then also,” are awkward and do not show the relationship between ideas precisely. The conclusion introduces a future prediction rather than drawing together the reasons already discussed. Organise the body around distinct points—progress in public life and continuing barriers—and use clear references and transitions to show how each supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “freedom,” “gender equality,” “workplace,” “restriction” and “mentality,” so the reader can follow your main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making meaning less natural. For example, “a full percentage of gender equality” does not express the idea clearly, and “make the world glory” is not an idiomatic phrase. “High sectors of the governments work” is also difficult to interpret. Aim to learn topic-specific combinations as well as individual words, such as “achieve gender equality,” “senior government positions” and “traditional attitudes.” More precise vocabulary would help you explain both progress and remaining inequalities.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including contrasts introduced by “However” and clauses beginning with “That.” Nevertheless, the range is limited, and errors in sentence formation, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to read. For instance, “In the earlier time there is a too many rules” has problems with tense and sentence structure, while “some parent and the men are keep the past mentality” has errors in number and verb form. The opening sentence is also difficult to parse. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check tense consistency when comparing past and present, and review articles, plural nouns and sentence boundaries before submitting.

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