Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The status of female ones has changed at higher level in many colonies over the past 50 years but these societies have no longer trust in gender equality. Thought processes of humans are very typical overall but in terms of women impowerment it left no crumbs. Actually, i agree about this statement because people have a typical point of views and this essay will dicuss my personal point of views in further paragraphs.

Women worked hard for the progress and prosperity of their families as well as for their own. If we talk about the last 50 years then it is obvious that women ate and left no crumbs at all in term of work hard. But societies have a fix mindset that they cannot bear anyone at high status especially for women this view is on large scale. Woman are the creations who always paid their fukl attention and time on hardworking but unfortunately, they never get appreciation according to they deserve.

I think in this era, no one is less than any other in category of gender too. For example, if we take a overview on the present circumstances then it is clear that women are even working on large sceles as compare to men because boys are careless especially in the current era. But societies never claimed that women are even equal to men. Almsot in every five of the tenth houses, women are working on first time and second time they are doing work of home. Even when they come back from jobs, men always pretend in front of them that they are lower than their husbands or brothers as well as fathers.

In conclusion, although women are giving their best in every single field and aspect of their lives as compare to men .But they always treated like they are not equal to men because of typical custom of the societies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you agree that societies have not achieved gender equality, and you refer to women’s work, unequal recognition, and domestic responsibilities. These points are relevant, but they are often asserted rather than explained or supported with specific examples. For instance, the claim that women work more than men because “boys are careless” is a broad generalisation and does not convincingly demonstrate inequality. The discussion of women doing “first time and second time” work is also unclear. To strengthen the response, explain how particular inequalities persist—such as pay gaps, leadership representation, or the unequal division of household work—and show how each example supports your position. The essay addresses the question, but its ideas remain limited and under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The paragraphs broadly group related points, and phrases such as “For example” and “In conclusion” help signal the direction of the essay. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from family contributions to social attitudes without clearly connecting the ideas, while the second includes several claims that do not build into a clear argument. Some linking phrases are repetitive or mechanical, and references such as “this view” and “they” are not always precise. Improve cohesion by giving each paragraph one main claim, developing it in a logical sequence, and using clear references and transitions to show how examples support that claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary related to the topic, including “progress and prosperity,” “appreciation,” and “typical mindset.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or informal, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “female ones,” “changed at higher level,” “no longer trust in gender equality,” and “ate and left no crumbs,” which is slang and unsuitable for this formal essay. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “impowerment,” “dicuss,” and “Almsot.” Aim for precise, conventional academic expressions and check spelling carefully. Replacing vague or conversational phrases with terms such as “women’s status,” “gender equality,” and “unequal treatment” would make your argument clearer and more appropriate to the task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple sentences and some attempts at longer structures, including clauses beginning with “although” and “because.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “Woman are the creations who always paid” has problems with number agreement and verb form, while “they never get appreciation according to they deserve” has an incorrect clause structure. The final sentence also joins contrasting ideas awkwardly: “although … .But …”. Practise building accurate sentences before adding complexity, and check subject–verb agreement, verb tense, and sentence boundaries. Clearer punctuation and more reliable clause structures would make your ideas easier to understand.

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