Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today's modern world the position of women has changed a great in many societies over the past 50 years but society cannot claims to have achieved gender equality. people have different opinions about this issue. some people believe that it has positive impacts on society ,while other argue that it can create several problems.

In my opinion, this problem has both advantages and disadvantages, depending on how it is managed. Over tha past 50 years the position of women has changed in many ways it is due to advancement of modern world.I agree with the people of modern world who believe education is significant for women as much as for men. women also should independent and them should work for a better lifestyle. women also have right to study and get progressed. women should also set their aims high and also achieve them but within some boundries.Educating a women means educating a whole generation. Our religion also allow women to get eduction and to do jobs but in some boundries.However, uncivilized and un educated society with a cheak mindset believe that if a women becomes educated ,she will become rebellious.

Today most of people in society who do not educate their daughters just because of this fear that after becoming an independent women them will challenge traditional norms.these are all negative impacts of this issue and i totally disagree with this cheap mindset of so called society

In conclusion,women should be educated for their welfare. There should also be gender equality as human being because all individuals have equal rights and society should accept this fact.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response is relevant to women’s changing position and gender equality, and it expresses support for women’s education and equal rights. However, it does not clearly answer the extent question: the opening says society has not achieved equality, but the body shifts to whether women’s education has advantages or disadvantages, and the conclusion does not state how far you agree with the claim. Ideas such as fear of challenging traditional norms are relevant, but they are asserted rather than explained with specific examples or evidence. The discussion therefore addresses the task only partially, with a position and supporting ideas that remain limited. To strengthen it, state your degree of agreement directly and develop two reasons showing why important inequalities remain despite progress.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: the response has an introduction, a body discussing education and social attitudes, and a concluding paragraph. The ideas about women’s education and resistance to changing norms are related, and transitions such as “However” and “In conclusion” help signal movement between sections. Nevertheless, the overall progression is not clear because the introduction introduces advantages and disadvantages, while the essay does not consistently develop that framing or connect it to gender equality. Several ideas are repeated, particularly women’s right to study and work, and links between sentences are sometimes unclear. Use each body paragraph for one distinct reason, connect examples explicitly to your position, and make references such as “this issue” precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a limited but relevant set of vocabulary, including “gender equality,” “independent,” “traditional norms,” and “equal rights.” These expressions allow the reader to understand the general topic, but the range is repetitive and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which can make meaning less clear. Examples include “changed a great,” “get progressed,” and “within some boundries”; spelling errors such as “eduction” and “cheak” also reduce accuracy. The repeated use of “women,” “society,” and “education” limits variety. Build a more precise vocabulary for discussing inequality, such as employment opportunities, representation, discrimination, and social expectations, and check spelling and natural word combinations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, for example, “Educating a women means educating a whole generation” and the sentence beginning “Today most of people in society…”. However, complex attempts are often faulty, and frequent errors can make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Examples include “society cannot claims,” “women also should independent,” and “them will challenge,” which show problems with verb forms, sentence structure, and pronoun use. Articles and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “a women” and “Our religion also allow.” Punctuation and capitalisation are unreliable, particularly at sentence beginnings. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and complete sentence patterns, then proofread each sentence for articles, pronouns, and punctuation.

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