Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The currently all the Societies generation has been changed to past generation around thee whole world.

In this generation was totally changed to the past generation like the current generation lives in own different life style they cannot live in restriction.

I fully agree with this changed society aura just for example like the around past 50 years women generation is lived in the societies restriction like they lived in lots of type limitation on his family.

Example like: the past 50 years female wear compulsory saree front of the family and societies and also lived in veil.

And currently the generation was totally changed like the current generation can not lives in diminution on society and family so they want to freedom of everything they live like to freedom of all the thing.

Example: the till generation women wear jeans and top front off the society and family even also wear lost of other type of short cloth like their family has like or not like they can not care they always shows to what they want even they fight with the parents and family if they told this is not good.

So as per my opinion and what can i shows in currently the here generation the people called Zeng the meaning to live in own life without any restriction so the lost is they cannot achieved big on life because they not like to live in frugality so that's way they have limitation in physical life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response addresses the topic but fails to develop a coherent argument regarding gender equality. The focus is primarily on personal appearance and clothing choices rather than broader societal issues like the gender pay gap, political representation, or domestic roles. The position is somewhat contradictory, as you agree with the change but then suggest that modern freedom leads to a lack of achievement. Furthermore, the response is under the 250-word minimum, which limits the depth of your analysis. To improve, you should focus on structural societal changes and provide more relevant, balanced examples that directly address the prompt's claim about gender equality.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and often repetitive. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the awkward transition 'Example like:' and the repetitive use of 'the generation was totally changed'. The lack of clear linking words makes it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and use transition words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' to connect your ideas more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There is frequent misuse of words, such as 'aura' instead of 'era', 'diminution' instead of 'restrictions', and 'frugality' which does not fit the context of the argument. Many phrases are unidiomatic, such as 'the till generation' and 'short cloth'. The range is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the repetition of basic vocabulary hinders the clarity of your writing. You should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to social change and gender studies to improve your precision and range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'women generation is lived'), and article usage. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, making them difficult to parse. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors in basic tense and word order are pervasive throughout the text. To improve, focus on mastering simple sentence construction before attempting complex structures, and pay close attention to verb tenses and pluralization rules.

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