Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Over the past 50 years, women have changed a great deal in many societies and cannot claim to have achieved gender equality. However, I strongly agree with this view since inequality to career opportunities and victim blaming are still very common nowadays.

In the past, women formed different societies to fight for their rights and safety which was successful. There were laws and policies regarding gender equality, women, empowerment and women's right which boosted their confidence because they are now protected. In comparison to the past where support system for women is not available, and that they suffered a lot from the hands of their abusers.

Nevertheless, I strongly agree that they cannot claim to have achieved gender equality since there are still gender biases and victim blaming, where women are the most affected. Inequality in career opportunities is very common to in women since they are seen to be less capable, such as in the field of engineering and architecture where workers are mostly men. In addition, victim blaming is very rampant nowadays. For instance, in the case of rape, most women are blamed just because they are wearing sexy clothes. As a result, many girls are now having doubts in reporting any harassment or assault.

To conclude, women having achieved a great deal in many societies in the past, and I strongly believe that they cannot claim to have achieved gender equality since there are still gender biases that affects a lot of women's right and safety nowadays.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

Ang sanaysay ay tumutugon sa prompt sa pamamagitan ng pagpapakita ng malinaw na paninindigan at pagbibigay ng mga kaugnay na argumento tungkol sa career inequality at victim blaming. Gayunpaman, ang pagpapalawak ng mga ideya ay medyo limitado. Ang unang body paragraph ay malabo, na binabanggit ang 'different societies' at 'laws' nang walang mga tiyak na halimbawa o malinaw na koneksyon sa kasalukuyang estado ng gender equality. Ang pangalawang body paragraph ay mas nakatuon, ngunit ang argumento ay nananatiling medyo mababaw. Upang maabot ang mas mataas na band, dapat kang magbigay ng mas detalyadong paliwanag at marahil ay mas nuanced na talakayan tungkol sa kung paano nagkaroon ng pag-unlad kumpara sa kung saan nananatili ang mga puwang, sa halip na ilista lamang ang mga problema.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

Ang sanaysay ay naka-organisa sa mga lohikal na talata, at may malinaw na introduksyon at konklusyon. Ang mga cohesive device ay ginamit, gaya ng 'Nevertheless', 'In addition', at 'As a result', na nakakatulong sa daloy ng mga ideya. Gayunpaman, ang ilang transisyon ay medyo mekanikal, at ang referencing ay paminsan-minsang hindi malinaw, gaya ng sa unang body paragraph kung saan ang koneksyon sa pagitan ng mga historical society at ng kasalukuyang sitwasyon ay hindi ganap na naipaliwanag. Ang pag-unlad ng mga ideya ay karaniwang lohikal, ngunit ang panloob na istruktura ng mga talata ay maaaring mas higpitan upang matiyak ang mas tuluy-tuloy na daloy ng impormasyon.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Nagpapakita ka ng sapat na saklaw ng bokabularyo para sa task, gamit ang mga termino gaya ng 'gender biases', 'empowerment', at 'harassment'. Gayunpaman, may ilang kamalian sa pagpili ng salita at collocation, gaya ng 'inequality to career opportunities' (dapat ay 'in') at 'very common to in women'. Ang bokabularyo ay karaniwang functional ngunit kulang sa katumpakan at sopistikasyon na kinakailangan para sa mas mataas na band. Upang mag-improve, mag-focus sa paggamit ng mas maraming academic collocation at pag-iwas sa paulit-ulit na pagpapahayag gaya ng 'very common' o 'very rampant'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

Ang sanaysay ay gumagamit ng halo ng simple at komplikadong mga istruktura ng pangungusap. Bagama't ang kahulugan ay karaniwang malinaw, may mga madalas na pagkakamali sa gramatika, gaya ng 'support system for women is not available' (tense inconsistency), 'women having achieved a great deal' (fragmented sentence structure sa konklusyon), at 'that affects a lot of women's right' (subject-verb agreement). Ang mga pagkakamaling ito ay hindi humahadlang sa komunikasyon, ngunit ang mga ito ay madalas na sapat upang maiwasan ang mas mataas na score. Ang pag-focus sa subject-verb agreement at pare-parehong verb tense ay makabuluhang magpapahusay sa katumpakan ng iyong pagsulat.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.