Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In contemporary era, while, in many nations, while the role of females has changed over the past decades. It is believed that women still have not taken their full rights. In this essay, I will disagree with this given statement and elaborate in upcoming paragraphs with my opinion.
To begin with, discrimination against females is still present in the workplaces in these places men are highly recomended rather than womens and multinational campanies are higher jobs for males employees because of leadership quality as well as communication skills. Moreover, it is true that females take their decision emotionally rather than rationally. For example, a survey has been conducted in Canada which showed that 80% female took decision emotionally during jobs.
Futhermore, women still suffer from
health disease differ pregency so that companies are hire males employes because of higher strength power and hardworking during their work. In addition, in some societies a female has to take a male's approval if she wants to leave her house and she is not allowed to make any decisions regarding her children.
To conclude, female have come a long way to prove their presence in societies but I believed that nations are not even near achieving class quality either socially.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The essay fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the prompt asks for an opinion on gender equality, the response is underdeveloped and contains contradictory statements; the introduction states the author will 'disagree' with the prompt, yet the conclusion argues that nations are 'not even near achieving' equality, which aligns with the prompt's premise. The arguments provided are based on generalizations and lack logical depth. Due to the significant under-length and the lack of clear, consistent argumentation, the response does not fully address the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with' and 'Moreover', they are often used mechanically. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the lack of sufficient word count prevents the development of a cohesive argument. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the internal structure of the paragraphs is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the author's line of reasoning throughout the piece.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'recomended' instead of 'recommended', 'campanies' for 'companies', and 'pregency' for 'pregnancy'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively, and the misuse of terms like 'class quality' instead of 'gender equality' hinders the clarity of the argument. The student relies on basic terminology, which restricts the ability to convey a sophisticated or nuanced perspective on the topic.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'females take their decision'), incorrect pluralization (e.g., 'womens', 'males employes'), and sentence fragments (e.g., 'women still suffer from health disease differ pregency'). The range of sentence structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. These persistent errors indicate a lack of control over basic grammatical structures.
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