Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is seemed that although, position of women in last 5 decades has changed in society as they are well qualified and doing jobs, can not attain gender equality. I agree with this notion because women would get occupation in some job but sometimes can not get equal pay. there are enormous reasons that I will discuss in subsequent paragraphs along with examples.
To begin with, gender pay gap is the main reason because immense entrepreneur decreases the wages of women . they asserts that women's do less efforts then men also as strength and accurately. Moreover, females have myriad burden of their family because look after of children, cooking, washing cloths and many more. Some societies reckon that these not all women work not for muscular. Apart from it, physical safety is also concerned as in majority of countries people not allows their females to work at night.
On the other hand, on my stages these day both genders are equal. On top of it, education as all universities and colleges are enrolled same. But after study if she want to participate in parliament . There is not 30% women seats only.
To Conclude, although
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 196 words. Furthermore, the essay is incomplete, ending abruptly in the conclusion. While you establish a clear position, the development of ideas is limited and often lacks sufficient supporting evidence. For instance, the point about the gender pay gap is mentioned but not fully explored, and the argument regarding political representation is underdeveloped. To improve, you must ensure you complete the essay structure and provide more detailed explanations and relevant examples for each point to fully address the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay attempts to use paragraphing and some cohesive devices, such as 'To begin with' and 'Moreover', but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and incomplete thoughts. The transition between paragraphs is mechanical, and the lack of a finished conclusion significantly impacts the overall coherence of the piece. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'on my stages these day', which makes it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, unified focus will help improve your score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'immense entrepreneur' instead of 'employers' and 'muscular' used in an inappropriate context. You also rely on basic vocabulary, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas effectively. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to social issues and gender equality, and practice using more sophisticated synonyms to replace repetitive or basic terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'women's do less efforts'), article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'It is seemed that although...'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some errors in complex attempts. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions and articles, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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