Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Over the past decade The female was treated as a equal right to take their decisons in every corner of world.Some other argue that nowadays cannot claim to have equality in both genders.I partially agree with this statement as both of the ways hold their own significance.
To commence with, In recent years the way we see the women has changed because in some nation women will treat as a god .To explain, when poeple talk about females they give respect to them. Futhermore, In that time society was follow the rules by their previous generation and mandatory to consider them. For example, In the few last decade people consider both genders equally treated them in all field related to any work.
As a result, people didn't often conflict for discrimination.
In today world ,individuals feel that gender equality is only news but in real life it doesn't work.In detail,society would be me more biased for males because they think females face a issue regarding take their decision on related to their own choice but they can't take their decision infact their all decision taken by their family or husband. For instance, male has a special power to control the females about their rights or preference.Due to this society can not give equal individual rights .
In conclusion, equality is only about printing in paper for education poetry or news But in real no body focus on real situations.However, this is thing affect for future female equality
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt but fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which negatively impacts the development of ideas. While you present a position, the arguments are often underdeveloped and lack logical depth. For instance, the claim that women are treated as 'gods' is not clearly linked to the broader discussion of gender equality, and the explanation regarding decision-making is repetitive. To improve, you should ensure each paragraph provides a clear, well-supported argument that directly addresses the 'extent' of your agreement. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not effectively synthesize the main points discussed in the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the progression of ideas is often unclear. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the awkward transition 'In that time society was follow the rules'. Referencing is occasionally confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. Paragraphing is present, but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'nevertheless') more naturally and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are several instances of awkward word choices and non-standard collocations, such as 'The female was treated as a equal right' and 'printing in paper'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use less common lexical items accurately. To reach a higher band, you should work on expanding your range of academic vocabulary and pay closer attention to word forms and collocations, ensuring that your choice of words is precise and contextually appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'society was follow the rules'), article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'this is thing affect for future'). You rely primarily on simple sentence structures, and your attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors that obscure the intended meaning. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect pluralization.
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