Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is extensively acknowledged that involvement of females in different communities chnaged from the past half decade. However, few socities had not been claimed that in discrimination on the based on gender is completely eradicated.I partially believed in proposed notion and reason for my inclination will be glanced in ensuing paragraphs.

To commence with, condition of womens have transformed dramatically over the past generations. To explicate, if I talk about 1900s or 1800s time then it was the era of men dominating society womens were treated like a slave and also considered that womens were only came in world to expand the generations of family by giving birth to infants additionally, also believed they were to volatile in physical strength compared to males some restrictions were also applied on girls while, after twenty centuries conditions of girls changed at present they are able to stand with men and assisting society to devlop.For instance, it seems in records of national authorities department over 70% womens are responsible for the growth of nation along with in other major sectors.Hence, girls are also citizen, human in this world so ought to provide equal rights as men.

Moving other notion not hundered percent rights are given to womens . To elaborate, even in this modern era in some areas of world feminism still followed by men dominationg socities.For example, a survey was conducted by British india society it reveals that there is 30% of rural areas where found were women are not treated as a human.Thus,still some nations does not been growed with the socities.

Agglomerating aforementioned points it can be concluded that although, womens are equally appreciated for growth of nation therefore, few regions are not decloped with generation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by acknowledging the progress made in gender equality while arguing that full equality has not been reached. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. The historical comparison is somewhat confused (referencing '1900s or 1800s' as 'twenty centuries' ago), and the supporting evidence, such as the '70% of women' statistic, lacks clear context or source credibility. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the arguments presented. While the position is clear, the supporting points are often under-developed or rely on vague generalizations, which limits the depth of the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear transitions. While cohesive devices like 'To commence with' and 'To elaborate' are used, they are sometimes applied mechanically or incorrectly. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final sentence where 'not decloped with generation' is difficult to interpret. The flow between sentences is often disjointed, making it challenging for the reader to follow the argument's development smoothly throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and often imprecise. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'involvement of females... chnaged from the past half decade' (likely meaning 'half a century') and 'not decloped with generation'. Some terms are used incorrectly, such as 'feminism' when referring to patriarchal structures. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the presence of spelling errors (e.g., 'socities', 'devlop', 'hundered') indicate a restricted lexical range that struggles to express complex ideas accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('few socities had not been claimed'), incorrect verb tenses ('does not been growed'), and missing articles. Sentence structures are often simple or contain run-on errors, such as the opening sentence. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, these are frequently marred by errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods throughout the text.

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