Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Women throughout the years have faced significant amount of discrimination in the nature of treatment compared to men. This phenomenon has however changed over the last five decades in many societies, however there is still a lag in achieving gender equality. According to me this hold true to some extent but various aspects like job opportunities and safety has improved significantly.

I believe that there still lies a minor discrimination in the society regarding the capabilities that people think women tend to not have regarding leadership. This can be seen from the ratio of world leaders where the count of men overpowers that of women. There lies these differences because of the culture and age old tradition that perceives women as the sole bread maker of the family and men being the bread earner.

There are however major changes that can be seen amongst the job opportunities that women get these days in comparisons to the few decades ago. Government has taken significant steps to implement seat reservations and compulsion of a certain ratio of women to be present in a company. Women in India are given free basic education which was not the case 50 years ago and due to this women get to learn and express ones feelings.

In conclusion, in my opinion, women are given significant opportunities in recent years as compared to last 50 years which has definitely eliminated gender inequality to a great extent. However there are still few areas like leadership and culture imbalance that needs a major change.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by acknowledging both the progress made and the remaining challenges regarding gender equality. The position is clear throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the mention of 'seat reservations' and 'free basic education' in India is a good start, but the link to global gender equality could be more explicitly connected to the prompt's broader scope. The argument regarding leadership is relevant but could be supported with more depth. Overall, the response covers all parts of the task, but some points remain slightly under-developed, fitting the criteria for a band 6.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'however', 'in conclusion', and 'this can be seen from', which help the flow of ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive, and there are minor issues with referencing (e.g., 'There lies these differences'). The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the logical links between sentences could be more sophisticated to achieve a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey their meaning clearly. There are attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'discrimination', 'gender equality', and 'implementation'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'sole bread maker' (usually 'homemaker') and 'compulsion of a certain ratio' (which is slightly awkward). The range is sufficient to discuss the topic, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('there still lies a minor discrimination', 'aspects... has improved') and awkward phrasing ('in the nature of treatment'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the frequency of errors prevents the writing from being considered error-free. The control of grammar is sufficient for communication but shows a need for more consistent accuracy in complex structures.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.