Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often claimed that , In modern ear many people think women position has changed in some societies many years ago . but some societies people think that , this change cannot claim to acheived gender equality. i agree with this point women position changed in many societies past 50 years

Initating with points, firstly , some societies changed women positions many years ago , Nowadays , women are independent because they doing jobs and having good positions in many companies . moreover , women have good asses of education and work life because they earn good salaries . for instance , now many women got good position on their work like they becoming doctor , engenerie and scientest . furthermore ,women have more freedom to make their own decisions and participate public life . in addition , many womens win a many prize and acheived fame and name in many societies .

Moving further ahead , but some societies cannot claim have to acheived gender equality . because old people beleive that man position are more powerful because Mens are earn good salaries and they can going to work anywhere moreover , in many companies give good opportunities to men because they require only Mens job criteria like management and engenering furthermore , many manes doing their work for long hours because they have not any responsibelites for house chores works . in addition , many companies mostly prefer to men becacuse mens do not any house work and they donnt want any leave

in conclusion in many societies changed women position in last 50 years is good impact because womens got good oportunities and many companies give good saleries moreover, but some companies give good opprtunities only men

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by acknowledging the progress made in gender equality while arguing that full equality has not been reached. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you provide examples like women becoming doctors or engineers, the explanation of why inequality persists is somewhat repetitive and relies on generalizations about 'men's jobs' and 'house chores.' To improve, you should aim to provide more nuanced arguments and deeper analysis of the societal structures that prevent equality, rather than listing roles or repeating the idea that men are preferred for certain positions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'Initating with points' or 'Moving further ahead.' There are also issues with punctuation, particularly the frequent misuse of commas and spacing, which disrupts the flow of ideas. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects logically to the overall argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'good' and 'many,' and there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'engenerie' for engineering, 'scientest' for scientist, 'beleive' for believe). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precise, academic vocabulary prevents a higher score. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific collocations related to gender studies or sociology and focus on accurate spelling of common professional terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'women position changed,' 'many manes doing their work'), incorrect verb forms ('they can going to work'), and pluralization ('many womens'). The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically the use of articles, plural forms, and correct verb tenses before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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