Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The stage of females in the societies replaced a 50 years ago and there is no any bad clue found about them. I am totally agree with this statement because nowadays women become the essential part of society. I will explain few reasons that support my opinion.

First of all, nowadays the women become very popular and important for every society but if we saw in past the condition of women were helpless because in the past females needs to do work in field with men and this was basically held in villages. But the life of present women are more easy as compare to past women.

Second of all, in the past women were not allowed to learn knowledge and also they ere not allowed to study in colleges, universities. And this was the main reason of their poverty and their weakness. For example, this is true point if one women educated in the society then it helped other women to learn knowledge.

Third of all, present age women are well educated and they are allow go to their schools and it was result female are too famous in all over the world. For example the, the Japan government provides many facilities to their females. The Japan lady worker got their whole five month salary before the birth of their child. and medical facilities are provided them. The ladies also do all their duty on time required time and also they represents their responsibilities.

In conclusion, women become a vital part of every society and a community never progress if they are not funding on their females.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by acknowledging the progress of women while agreeing that gender equality has not been fully achieved. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding education and employment are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the example about Japan is somewhat confusing and does not clearly link back to the broader argument about societal gender equality. The position is clear, but the supporting points are under-developed, and the conclusion is quite brief. To improve, you should provide more specific, well-explained examples that directly support your stance on why gender equality remains elusive despite progress.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay uses basic cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'Second of all', and 'In conclusion' to structure the response. While these help the reader follow the progression, the paragraphing is somewhat mechanical. The logical flow within paragraphs is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as the transition between the historical context and the modern examples. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track the subject matter. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified topic sentence that connects logically to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'women', 'society', and 'past'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'bad clue found about them' and 'the stage of females'. Some phrases are unnatural, such as 'the Japan lady worker'. To improve, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary and collocations related to social issues, such as 'gender parity', 'socio-economic advancement', or 'systemic barriers'. Expanding your range of synonyms and learning how to use them in context will significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'women become', 'condition of women were'), article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'I am totally agree'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some attempts at complex ones that are often faulty. For example, 'if one women educated in the society then it helped other women' contains multiple errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, verb tenses, and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures.

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