Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The position of women has changed significantly in many socities over the last 50 years. However i agree that gender equailty has not yet been fully achieved because women still face inequality in areas such as employment pay and social responsibilities.
On the one hand ,women had drastic progress in recent decades.Nowadays women have more freedom to make their decision about their education career and personal lives.they can work in many professions that were traditonaly dominated by men.
On the other hand,i believe that complete gender equality is not yet been achieved .one major issue in income between men and womenin some workplaces.furtehrmore women often soend more time looking after their children and doingh household works even when they have full time job.as result yhey have much less time and energy to develop their lives and their career.
In conclusion women have made significant progress over the past 50 years particulalry in educationm employment and personal freedom but they still have faciong many problems that can be throne in their devoping paths.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 172 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you clearly state your position and provide relevant points regarding employment and domestic responsibilities, the arguments are underdeveloped. To reach a higher band, you must expand on your points with specific examples, explanations, or hypothetical scenarios. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not effectively synthesize the arguments presented. Because the task is significantly under-length, the development of ideas is restricted, preventing a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion' to signal shifts in your writing. However, the flow within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where referencing is unclear or missing. For example, the transition between the discussion of employment and household responsibilities could be smoother. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a more cohesive whole.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You use some relevant topic-specific vocabulary like 'gender equality', 'professions', and 'income', but there are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'socities', 'equailty', 'traditonaly', 'furtehrmore', 'soend', 'doingh', 'particulalry', 'educationm'). These errors, while not always impeding communication, are distracting. To improve, you should focus on using more sophisticated collocations and ensuring accuracy in spelling. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic synonyms will also help you express your ideas with greater precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as missing articles ('in income', 'have full time job'), incorrect verb forms ('is not yet been achieved', 'have faciong'), and punctuation issues (missing spaces after commas and periods). These errors are noticeable and occasionally affect the clarity of your writing. To improve, you should practice subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Additionally, proofreading for basic punctuation and capitalization errors would significantly improve the overall accuracy of your work.
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