Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, number of people think that the position of women has changed in many of societies over the past 50 years however it can be claimed to achieved gender equality i disagree with this statement and my points will be in further paragraph.
To be honest the gender equality of women in many societies is being changed from past 50 years. present days women are becoming very knowledgeable and get a job in all over the world as compare to men. Furthermore , women are managing both their social and work life.
secondly, In many societies they all give respect to women and help to be stand equal to men not below and this thing is very good such as they educate all the girls as educate boys and societies also favored women to be educated.
On the other hand, in many of societies they do not give rights to women to have their decision and compare with boys. Somehow it is vary negative thinking in this generation.
in con
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 170 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address the prompt by stating your disagreement, the arguments remain superficial and lack sufficient supporting examples or depth. The essay is also incomplete, ending abruptly with 'in con'. To improve, you must expand your points with specific evidence or real-world examples and ensure you provide a full conclusion. Currently, the response is too brief to fully explore the complexities of gender equality, leading to an underdeveloped argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay uses basic cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'secondly', and 'On the other hand', which help to signal the structure. However, the logical progression is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Paragraphing is attempted, but the ideas within them are not well-connected or fully elaborated. The lack of a proper conclusion and the abrupt ending disrupt the overall flow of the argument. To improve, focus on linking sentences more fluidly and ensuring each paragraph contains a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details that lead logically to the next point.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'good', 'changed', and 'very'. There are instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'help to be stand equal to men' and 'vary negative thinking', which suggest a lack of precision. You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'gender equality' and 'societies', but the range is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and collocations, and work on using words in their correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with articles ('number of people' instead of 'a number of people'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. For example, 'it can be claimed to achieved' is grammatically incorrect. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect word forms.
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