Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Introduction
According to the view, societies not claim that the women over the past 50 years, get the gender equility. I largely agree with this because each women have gender equlity.
Thesis
I do not believe that this is a negative tend, because women have their own basic needs so according to this they have their own right to do something in the society for their lives.
Opinion
women play important role in different sites, For example they work as a Doctor,Nurse, and as a Teachers . As a result, they must be have the rights for gender equality in society.
Conclusion
Overall, Women play a important role in the development of country . They proofs their self in different kinds of tasks, as well as a mother work as a role models and according to this they must be have right to stay in the society with gender equality.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, significantly impacting the development of ideas. The essay is only 150 words long, which results in a very limited discussion of the prompt. While the student attempts to state a position, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack the necessary depth and supporting examples required for an academic essay. The response does not fully address the complexity of the prompt, remaining superficial throughout. To improve, the student must expand on their points with specific evidence and ensure the essay meets the required length to allow for a full exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into sections labeled 'Introduction', 'Thesis', 'Opinion', and 'Conclusion', which is not appropriate for an IELTS essay format. The progression of ideas is disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is minimal and often mechanical. There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, making the argument difficult to follow. Paragraphing is not used effectively to structure the essay, and the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is unclear. To improve, the student should use standard paragraph structures and a wider range of linking words to connect ideas more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are several spelling errors, such as 'equility' and 'equlity' for 'equality', and 'proofs' instead of 'prove'. The range of vocabulary is basic, and the student struggles to use precise terminology related to the topic of gender equality. The phrasing is often awkward, such as 'different sites' and 'must be have the rights'. To improve, the student should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary and practicing correct spelling and word forms in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'each women have' and 'they must be have'. Sentence structures are simple and repetitive, with very few attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. The lack of control over basic grammar, such as pluralization and verb forms, significantly lowers the score. To improve, the student needs to focus on fundamental grammar rules, particularly verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of modal verbs.
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