Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The role of female has altered the great impact on the community for the last 5 decades. However, these civilized groups cannot stand to be on this assert to have clamed equal rights for both genders. I do agree with this statement because men always feel superior to women and this change in roles are hard to swallow for them.

Therefore, women are much important as men because if we talk about current global situation both men and women have to work together to build a suitable ecosystem to leave because of the inflation both have to work and do help each other in household matters. Women doctors are needed in my country who are specialized in gynae because women prefers to go to them because of being same gender they feel safe. In law firm women are growing rapidly because of the same rights they are demanding for many years

However, some individuals do believe that because men are more strong and can deal with pain more significantly and can control their emotions. They are much more ideal to work, they can do much more difficult job than women but women stood firmly in this ideology too they not only make there place but also work with same belief a man works.

Consequently, not only the position of women has changed in the betterment of society. They do deserve same rights as men and they are not inferior to any gender and we need gender equality in every aspect of world weth its household work or in industrial scale.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by acknowledging the progress made in gender equality while arguing that true equality has not yet been achieved. You clearly state your position in the introduction and support it with relevant examples, such as the need for female gynecologists and the rise of women in law. However, some arguments are under-developed; for instance, the claim that men 'always feel superior' is a broad generalization that lacks nuance. To reach a higher band, ensure that your supporting points are more balanced and analytical rather than relying on personal observations. The conclusion effectively summarizes your stance, though it could be more explicitly linked to the initial prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices like 'However', 'Therefore', and 'Consequently' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'leave because of the inflation'. The transition between the second and third paragraphs is a bit abrupt. To improve, work on using a wider variety of cohesive devices and ensuring that the relationship between sentences is more fluid and natural, which will help the reader follow your argument more easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'gender equality', 'ecosystem', and 'industrial scale'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'role of female has altered the great impact' and 'hard to swallow'. Additionally, there are minor spelling errors like 'weth' instead of 'with' and 'gynae' (which is informal). To achieve a higher score, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and improving your control over collocations to avoid unnatural phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, they often contain grammatical errors, such as 'women are much important as men' (should be 'more important than') and 'women prefers' (subject-verb agreement error). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some missing commas that would help clarify your meaning. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity of your writing. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will significantly improve your accuracy.

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