Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It may indeed be true to say that position of women has faced a great change over the past 50 years but these societies are not able to claim that they have achieved gender equality .

From past , we are able to see that women had not specific place in society which was not a good thing. But with the passage of time , we can calculate that the government of every nation started work on the gender equality which was a very significant thing in the way of success. The condition also became change over 50 years .

Initially in the way of my thinking , women should have equal rights in society which pave the way of success of nation . By the equality of gender women can also work shoulder to shoulder with men . FOR EXAMPLE , ARFA KAREEM a young female got a great success in the field of MICROSOFT and computer science which was a very glorious part of her life . At early ages , women faced the shortage of rights and equality which affected the whole nations of world very much . By the time all these things became totally changed and women got all the rights equally . FOR EXAMPLE , QUEEN VICTORIA a queen which showed that the women of society also have the right of politics which was a very suplendid thing in the manner of rehabilitation of rights .

At first sight , the position of women appears to be entirely positive and beneficial . However , further analysis reveals drawbacks to this way of thinking . Here we came to know about the importance of gender equality which is a very great and beneficial way to become great or successful .

To conclude that everyone should have equal rights in nation to be great and glorious .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt but lacks a clear, consistent position. While you acknowledge that gender equality has not been achieved, the supporting arguments are underdeveloped and occasionally contradictory. For instance, the mention of Queen Victoria as an example of political rights is historically misplaced in the context of the last 50 years. The essay tends to drift into general statements about the importance of equality rather than critically evaluating the extent of progress or the remaining barriers. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the argument and provides relevant, contemporary evidence to support your claims.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression between ideas is weak. Transitions are often mechanical or misused, such as 'At first sight' and 'However', which do not accurately reflect the relationship between the preceding and following sentences. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow of the argument is interrupted by abrupt shifts in topic. To improve, use a wider variety of cohesive devices (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'despite this') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that links back to your main argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic phrasing like 'good thing', 'great success', and 'very significant'. There are instances of awkward word choices, such as 'suplendid' (spelling error) and 'manner of rehabilitation of rights', which sound unnatural. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the reliance on simple adjectives prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Focus on learning collocations and more academic vocabulary related to social issues to express your ideas with greater sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('position of women', 'shortage of rights'), incorrect verb tenses ('condition also became change'), and awkward sentence structures. While simple sentences are generally understandable, attempts at more complex structures often result in errors that can cause confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of spaces before commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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