Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
There is no denying fact that the phenomena of vast changing in women. Majority of folks are in the favour of this statement due to its number of merits. However, some of the people highlight its demerit first. I agree with this statement but if women will fulfill their dreams so they can not focus on family.
Initiating with the reason of the same, the first and foremost reason women desire to become indipendent own selve, because they want to get freedom. Furthermore, in present era women must not to do manage household due to they prefer they want self depend. For example, they develop their on business, job, work etc. Another, point is that women become more progresive to do party with friends they desire to world trip so thats why they want not depend on other person.
On the other hand, if female do job and remain busy their own busness so they can not hendle thair household, as well as they cannot guide their children. Similarly, they lost their reletion with otheres. For instence, family, friends, reletives, so on. My opinion women should become independent but they should manage thair reletionship first.
In conclusion to above the statement, it is a mixed bag of positives and negatives. Hence, the statement should not be underestimated. Nowadays
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt regarding whether societies have achieved gender equality, agreeing with the statement while introducing the trade-off with family life ("if women will fulfill their dreams so they can not focus on family"). However, the response falls significantly short of the 250-word minimum, containing only 218 words. This under-length impacts the full development of ideas, leading to a penalty under Task Achievement. While a position is stated, the arguments remain quite brief and superficial. Examples are provided, but the overall development is limited by the word count constraint. This aligns best with Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs with some structural attempts like "Initiating with the reason of the same" and "On the other hand". However, the logical progression is hindered by frequent awkward transitions and incomplete thoughts, such as the abrupt ending "Nowadays". Cohesive devices are often used inaccurately or mechanically, and referencing is occasionally unclear. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final paragraph consists of only two fragmented sentences, reducing the overall coherence of the response. These features place the text firmly at Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary range is limited and frequently strained by noticeable errors in word choice and form, such as "indipendent own selve", "progresive to do party", and "hendle thair household". Words are often misused or misspelled (e.g., "reletion", "reletives"). Although the writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as "merits", "independent", and "phenomena", the high frequency of lexical inaccuracies causes noticeable difficulty for the reader and prevents the response from achieving a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay displays a very limited range of sentence structures, with frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that frequently distort meaning or impede communication. Examples include "There is no denying fact that the phenomena of vast changing in women" and "women must not to do manage household due to they prefer they want self depend." Complex structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, and basic grammatical rules regarding verb forms, prepositions, and articles are frequently broken. This corresponds to a Band 4.5 level of grammatical control.
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