Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The position of women;

i agree that the position of women has changed over the past 50 years. But in this world some socities did not accept the gender equality still they are narrow minded. according to some socities women still concidered weak than man. But i disagree this gender difference.According to my mindset and opinion a women

has changed a great deal in different ways like she has involved in every critaria of life .For example she took part in sports,teaching,cooking,swimming,jimming,acting skills.politics,like in fasion indutry every field of life . i must say the women of today is very strong hard working and she manage also house and children .

First of all here i mensioned some details about gender equaliy

of women

Politics;

In todays world women involved in politics shoulder to shoulder with man.She joined politcs and win elections and became prime minister and do all activitiies like man. As like as i said before she has take part in every profession and field of life from my point of view i agree the quality of women

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 250 words, containing only 180 words, which significantly limits the development of ideas. While the student attempts to address the prompt by discussing women's roles in various fields like politics, sports, and fashion, the discussion remains superficial and under-developed. The writer's position is somewhat contradictory and unclear at times, shifting between agreeing and disagreeing with the prompt without a cohesive argumentative thread. Due to the severe under-length nature of the essay and the lack of fully supported main ideas, this response aligns closely with the Band 4 descriptors for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The overall organization is disjointed and lacks a clear, logical progression. The essay opens with an inappropriate title-like statement ("The position of women;") and uses erratic punctuation and capitalisation throughout. Although the writer attempts paragraphing and introduces a second paragraph with "First of all here i mensioned...", the transitions are mechanical and the internal flow of ideas is frequently disrupted. Referencing and cohesive devices are inadequate, making it difficult for the reader to follow a coherent argument. These features reflect the characteristics of a Band 4 performance for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student relies on simple everyday words and makes frequent spelling and word-choice errors, such as "socities", "concidered", "critaria", "jimming", "fasion indutry", "mensioned", and "equaliy". There is very little attempt to incorporate less common lexical items, and those that are attempted are inaccurate in form or collocation. The lexical range is minimally adequate for basic communication, but errors and limitations clearly strain the reader, fitting the Band 4 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting predominantly of simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex structures. There are persistent, major errors in punctuation, capitalization, subject-verb agreement, and tense consistency (e.g., "she has involved", "she took part... jimming, acting skills.politics,like in fasion indutry"). Basic sentence boundaries are often ignored, and lowercase letters are frequently used at the beginning of sentences and for the pronoun "i". These frequent and severe errors frequently distort meaning and impede communication, placing the response at Band 4.

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