Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Over the past 5 decades, women have made significant progress in many societies, yet it can be argued that gender equality has not been achieved. I agree with this statement to some extent, because even though equality is visible, there are still clear differences between men and women in societies.

Compared to the past, the current era is very much favorable towards women, back then women have significantly fewer opportunities than men do, largely because the older generation of women have fought for their rights with their way. As a result, women have the same rights as men do, women in many societies are able to afford education, as well as opportunity, and live independently. For example, women can now vote as well as candidate themselves as presidents.

However, this doesn't necessarily means that woman has achieved equality. Women may have earned the rights to learn and earn, but there are still differences such as career advancement, salary, and responsibilities. For example, men and a woman may be assigned to the same job by the same company with the same responsibilities, yet differences in pay and career advancement still occurs. In addition, women may be expected highly by their family members to take bigger responsibilities which makes them hard to dedicate the same amount of time for work as men always do.

In conclusion, women have earned tremendous rights, however that there are still inequalities that happens in workplace and within the family. So while women's overall condition has improved, there are still more left to be considered

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Respons tersebut menjawab semua bagian tugas dengan mengambil posisi yang jelas dan setuju sebagian mengenai apakah kesetaraan gender telah tercapai. Penulis menyajikan ide-ide yang relevan mengenai kemajuan historis serta perbedaan di tempat kerja dan keluarga di masa kini, seperti kemajuan karier, kesenjangan gaji, dan ekspektasi domestik. Namun, ide-ide tersebut kurang dijabarkan sepenuhnya dan kurang didukung bukti yang mendalam. Sebagai contoh, 'men and a woman may be assigned to the same job... yet differences in pay... still occurs' disebutkan secara umum tanpa konteks spesifik atau penjabaran yang lebih mendalam. Posisi tetap jelas sepanjang esai, tetapi pengembangan argumen pendukung menempatkan respons ini dengan nyaman pada Band 6.0 menurut deskriptor.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

Esai ini menyajikan susunan keseluruhan yang koheren dengan pendahuluan yang jelas, dua paragraf isi, dan kesimpulan. Penggunaan paragraf sudah tepat untuk memisahkan latar belakang sejarah dari ketidaksetaraan modern. Namun, kohesi pada tingkat kalimat terkadang kurang tepat dan terkesan mekanis. Frasa seperti 'back then women have significantly fewer opportunities' mengganggu alur logis karena pergeseran kala, dan perujukan terkadang kurang akurat, seperti 'which makes them hard' di mana rujukan kata gantinya agak kaku. Perangkat kohesif digunakan, tetapi kurang memiliki fleksibilitas dan transisi mulus yang menjadi ciri khas Band 7. Secara keseluruhan, pengorganisasiannya ada dan progresinya secara umum jelas, sehingga layak mendapatkan Band 6.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Siswa menggunakan rentang kosakata yang memadai untuk tugas tersebut, dengan sukses menyertakan istilah-istilah seperti 'significant progress', 'career advancement', dan 'inequalities'. Namun, terdapat kesalahan pilihan kata dan morfologi yang cukup mencolok di sepanjang teks. Sebagai contoh, 'candidate themselves as presidents' adalah kolokasi yang canggung dan penerapan gramatikal yang keliru dari 'candidate' sebagai kata kerja. Demikian pula, 'doesn't necessarily means' dan 'there are still more left to be considered' menunjukkan ketidakakuratan sesekali. Meskipun kosakatanya cukup untuk mengomunikasikan ide-ide utama secara efektif dan mencoba menggunakan kosakata yang lebih jarang digunakan, kesalahan leksikal yang berulang ini mencegah respons untuk mencapai band yang lebih tinggi, sehingga menempatkannya pada Band 6.0 yang solid.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Penulis menunjukkan gabungan bentuk kalimat sederhana dan kompleks, dengan menggunakan klausa bawahan ('because even though equality is visible', 'while women's overall condition has improved'). Namun, terdapat keberadaan kesalahan tata bahasa dan inkonsistensi kala yang persisten. Sebagai contoh, kalimat 'back then women have significantly fewer opportunities than men do' mengalami kesalahan penggunaan bentuk lampau (past tense). Kesalahan lainnya meliputi masalah kesesuaian subjek dan kata kerja (subject-verb agreement) seperti 'this doesn't necessarily means that woman has achieved' dan infinitif yang canggung seperti 'makes them hard to dedicate'. Tanda baca dan penggabungan kalimat dengan koma (comma splice) juga terjadi, seperti pada kesimpulan. Kesalahan-kesalahan ini tidak menghambat komunikasi secara keseluruhan, tetapi terjadi cukup sering sehingga menempatkan skor tata bahasa pada Band 5.5.

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