Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The role of women has very much changed over past 50 year. In previous time women where seen like a maid of the family first in which she is born and after she goes to her husband house after marrying him.People used to thing of women as a human which is not meant to do anthing except of cooking cleaning the house etc.But as people get develop they understand the importance of a women in our society.Without them human even dont exsist. Over the past 50 year the work of women changed so much.At first they where considered only as a free labour working in home but after tranfer of generation people understand that women is really important for our livelihood not just for human cycle for IT hubs, medical,armies in each and every part of our live. We can see many sector in which without women the company even not exsist.Now a days women are also leading men in many sector like owning the mncs. Women are creating job leading the country like in italy pm of italy is a women, in India president of India is a women. Means they are not just changing they are dominating every field.If you want to see sports, each and every sports has their one team and even performing well then a mens team , Women has won more medals then men in many sports.

But still in many parts of world some people see women as a thing not a women.

But i strongly believe that in few year there will be not even single discrimination against the women.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task only partially. While you present a clear position that you strongly believe discrimination against women will disappear soon, your ideas are limited and under-developed. You touch upon historical roles, modern employment sectors such as IT and the military, and female political leaders like the prime minister of Italy or the president of India. However, these points lack detailed support or deep exploration. Many of your arguments tend to over-generalise or remain repetitive without fully weighing whether true gender equality has actually been achieved yet. To move to a higher level, you need to extend your supporting points with more thorough explanations and relevant examples rather than listing isolated professions and countries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation in your writing, but it lacks a clear overall progression. The response suffers from poor paragraphing, as nearly the entire essay is lumped into one massive, block-like paragraph, with only a short concluding section separated at the end. Cohesive devices are used minimally and sometimes inaccurately, leading to a mechanical flow. For instance, transitions like 'At first' and 'Now a days' are overly basic, and referencing words are occasionally unclear, making it hard for the reader to follow the logical development of your thoughts. To improve, you should group your related ideas into distinct paragraphs with clear topic sentences and use a wider variety of cohesive markers to connect your arguments smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary range is limited, though it is minimally adequate to convey your basic message. You use repetitive words and simple terms throughout the essay, such as 'women', 'human', 'things', and 'sector'. There are noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word formation, such as 'human cycle' instead of 'human race', 'free labour', and 'tranfer of generation'. Spelling issues also occur, such as 'anthing', 'exsist', 'mncs' in lowercase, and 'mens'. These inaccuracies and limited vocabulary choices cause some difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher score, you should incorporate less common lexical items, ensure correct word forms, and use more precise phrasing suitable for academic writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Your control of grammar and punctuation shows a limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences or faulty attempts at complex ones. Frequent errors are present throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'women where seen', 'sports has their one team'), missing articles (e.g., 'in human society', 'is a women'), incorrect plural forms (e.g., 'then a mens team', 'more medals then men'), and poor punctuation. For example, sentences run together or lack proper punctuation boundaries, as seen in 'Without them human even dont exsist.' These frequent errors require the reader to decode your meaning and prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring correct verb tenses, and applying accurate articles and pluralisation.

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