Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Over the last half century women did a great job in past years and achived many goal according to these menifestion .

from soceity tyoical prospective womes are only belong to kitchen .study is not considerable of them .moreover mens are more strong then womens and women should stay home .outside is danger for womens that is why most of the people is against for womens study that is why can not accept the concept of human equality .

i parctuilly agreed or disagree with this opinion .For example , women is a sensitive creature in world . and we trained mens from starting . women can do watever she want in her life but in society women have to do many task in daily life whereas other gender can not do in daily rush .however women still blancing the daily task her goals , dreams and mainting ourself .

IN my opinion women can do everything women have potentiol to provin g oueself in the compitions . i think women are more powefull rather then the men because men dont have a alot of task in daily life but women did

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You refer to changes in women’s opportunities and express a view, particularly when you say women “can do everything” and have the potential to prove themselves. However, the response does not clearly answer the extent to which you agree or disagree: “i parctuilly agreed or disagree” gives no definite position, and the discussion shifts between traditional restrictions and claims about women’s abilities without explaining whether gender equality has been achieved. The examples and reasons are also very limited and largely general. The response is 192 words, below the required 250, so the argument has little room to address the question fully. State your position directly, then develop two relevant reasons with specific examples and a conclusion that answers the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into paragraphs, moving from traditional views of women to your opinion about their abilities. Some linking words, including “moreover,” “that is why,” and “however,” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several points are placed together without clear explanation, and the relationship between them is sometimes unclear. For example, the claim that women are “sensitive” is followed by a point about men being trained from the start, but the connection to equality is not explained. The final paragraph repeats the idea that women are capable rather than drawing the argument together. Use one main idea per paragraph and connect each reason explicitly to your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, such as “human equality,” “goals,” “dreams,” and “potential,” and you try to express ideas about social expectations and women’s opportunities. However, spelling errors and inaccurate or unnatural word choices often make the meaning difficult to understand, as in “menifestion,” “soceity tyoical prospective,” and “blancing the daily task.” Some expressions are also imprecise, including “women is a sensitive creature” and “men are more strong.” This limits the clarity and flexibility of your vocabulary. Build a reliable set of topic phrases, such as “gender equality,” “traditional gender roles,” and “equal access to education,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences, including a contrast introduced by “whereas” and a sentence beginning “because.” This shows some effort to vary sentence structure. However, errors in sentence formation and basic grammar frequently make the ideas hard to follow. Examples include “women is a sensitive creature,” “most of the people is against,” and “women did,” where subject–verb agreement or verb form is inaccurate. Several sentences also lack clear boundaries or punctuation, such as “and we trained mens from starting . women can do watever she want.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas using conjunctions. Check agreement, tense, articles, and sentence punctuation.

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