Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is true that the position of female has changed more in various scoitey since 50 years.contrast theseday female do not get equality like male.I agree with this statement with some extent.

To commence with, three are several reasons why woman get equally rights nowadays like man in society. Firstly, girls get right theseday in every job sector.This is because, government make many rules under sector girls and boys get jobs equally manners.For instance, In the modern era, government provide job opportunities 50% women and 50% man every year .As a result,they can get equally job opportunities in society.Secondly, these day women work outside. Owing to this, women go for work outside but in the past women did not give freedom to work outside travel. The can easily travel one place to another place.Therefore, They never feel discrimation between men and women.

However, In my opinion some areas women don not treate equally as men in community. first and the foremost reason is that, many rural areas society create discrimination girls and boys during the brith time. It is because they think girls are not pass out our generation next.Due to give more preference to boys. For instance, rural areas people celebrate birthday of boys during brith time instead of girls because they feel not happy that Time.

lastly, women have not right to go out side travel night. So that they have to their house whole day . By contrast they started feel tiredness.

In conclusion, Although there are many reasons community give equality female to male, many people rural areas don notgive equality.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position that gender equality has improved but remains incomplete, and the contrast between job opportunities and restrictions in rural communities is relevant to the question. However, the position is not consistently clear: the opening says you agree “with some extent,” while the first body paragraph largely claims women now receive equal rights and opportunities. The examples are also broad and not sufficiently explained. The claim that governments provide jobs equally to women and men is unsupported, and the discussion of celebrating boys’ births needs clearer explanation of how it demonstrates unequal status. Develop fewer points with specific evidence and make your degree of agreement explicit throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can identify an intended overall structure. The use of “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “However” signals some relationships between ideas. Nevertheless, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and linking phrases sometimes do not express the intended connection. For example, “Owing to this” does not clearly connect women working outside with the claim about past restrictions, while “By contrast” introduces no clear contrast in the final body paragraph. The conclusion repeats the general position without resolving the mixed claims in the introduction and first paragraph. Organise each paragraph around one main point and use simpler, more precise links between explanation and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “job opportunities,” “discrimination,” “rural areas,” and “preference,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make meaning difficult to follow. Phrases such as “the position of female,” “get equally rights,” “pass out our generation next,” and “feel tiredness” are not natural or precise in this context. Spelling errors such as “scoitey,” “theseday,” and “brith” also reduce clarity. Build a more accurate set of expressions for discussing equality, employment and social expectations, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would make your examples easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “although,” and “owing to,” and the reader can understand the broad argument. However, the range is limited, and complex attempts are often faulty. Examples include “government make many rules,” “women don not treate equally,” and “they have to their house whole day,” where verb forms or sentence construction are incomplete or inaccurate. Articles, agreement and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “the position of female” and the run-on spacing around several sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Check verb agreement, articles and sentence boundaries during revision.

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