Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this modern world, women status has significantly change in many societies over the past 50 years. Although these soieties cannot claim to have achieved gender equality.This essay will examine both reviews, and I Agree on that statment.

Overall, womens are now getting more education and knowledgeable. Like they are in all sector where only mens where there for example,they are becoming pilots,engnieers, doctors,lawyers etc. Today's women are more stronger and try new things. They are not just doing homechores but,also take care outdoor responsiblity easily.

On the other hand, women are still faceing discrimination with men and facing racism in many sectors for example in offices.if they are hard working and do all the work properly still they didn't get promotion. Make them inferior and try to control over them. There are still problem in gender equality. Futhermore, in some third world countries women cannot go outside with out any male or they should have to get permission.people also fellow culture, and in some culture their were no women rights only unfair with women facing problems. Their is also big problem is that women also faceing harassment on there work place and not feel safe.

In my conculsion, we should educate about women rights in future and teach mens about gender equality. so scoeity should for the good and now about the gender equality

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the central issue by recognising progress in women’s education and employment while arguing that discrimination and restrictions mean equality has not been achieved. Examples such as women becoming “pilots, engineers, doctors, lawyers” and being denied promotion are relevant. However, your position is not fully consistent: the opening says you agree that equality has not been achieved, but the conclusion shifts to general advice without clearly restating your view. Several points, including harassment and restrictions on movement, are listed rather than explained or supported with specific examples. The response is also 217 words, below the 250-word minimum; the eight words copied from the prompt are excluded. Develop fewer points in more detail and make your position explicit throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph about women’s progress, a contrasting paragraph about continuing inequality, and a conclusion. “On the other hand” helps signal the shift to the opposing evidence. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear because several ideas are joined in long, loosely connected sequences, particularly in the paragraph beginning “On the other hand.” Some linking is mechanical or inaccurate, and the conclusion does not clearly follow through on the position stated in the introduction. Improve cohesion by grouping related examples, using clear topic sentences, and making the relationship between each claim and its explanation explicit. Check punctuation around transitions and avoid abrupt fragments such as “Make them inferior.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “gender equality,” “discrimination,” “promotion,” “women rights,” and “harassment,” so the reader can follow the main concerns. There are also attempts to express a range of ideas about education, work, and social restrictions. However, the vocabulary is limited and some word choices or forms make meaning less clear, as in “women status,” “more stronger,” “outdoor responsibility,” and “fellow culture.” Spelling errors such as “soieties,” “engnieers,” and “conculsion” are noticeable and reduce precision. Build a more accurate range of topic-specific phrases, and check spelling and collocations carefully. For example, use “women’s status,” “follow cultural traditions,” and “responsibilities outside the home.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a contrast introduced by “Although” and a conditional example beginning “if they are hard working.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries frequently interrupt the flow. Examples include “women status has significantly change,” “women are still faceing discrimination,” and “There are still problem.” The opening also joins two sentences without a space after the full stop, while “Although these societies cannot claim…” is left as a dependent clause. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences with clear clause structure. Pay particular attention to subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and complete sentences.

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