Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In some cases people still argue about gender equality in this time where they think if women are able to do any task that can be done by men. Once a famous Indian actress talked about gender equality where she said,'Gender equality is not when women are able to work out as men and equality to basic rights like men having 2-3 kids are able and allowed to ride at midnight and women are forbidden to do so. She think that if being a father of kids he is able to be a CEO then she also is able to do it.

I totally agree that even after all the achievement women have made there is still arguements about equality. For example, a lots of womens are not allowed to work after getting married and even if they are then they have to do all the household after returning from work while their husbands will be resting. In recent year girls have been making huge progress in different like some are becoming pilot, doctors, corporate manager and politician.

Moreover, having a successful career would not bring the sense of equality. Our society have so much of women patriachy they think that women are not able of acheving what they can not. For example, many husbands believe that their wife or brother thinks his sister won;t be able to achieve as much as he did.

In conclusion, this is a misconception going on for a long period where they says that women are the form of god but do not care treating them as one so, I believe that after all the achievement women should to considered equal to men,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear in the opening of the second paragraph (“I totally agree”) and remains consistent in the conclusion. You also give relevant examples, including unequal household responsibilities and restrictions on women working after marriage, which address continuing inequality. However, the response only partly develops the task: the opening quotation is difficult to follow and its connection to the question is not clearly explained, while the examples about women entering professions are listed rather than used to show how far equality has or has not been achieved. The discussion also focuses mainly on work and domestic roles. To strengthen the response, explain each example and consider another dimension, such as pay, leadership, or safety.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Paragraphs generally group related points, and transitions such as “For example,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression between ideas is not always clear. The long quotation in the opening is hard to connect to the writer’s own argument, and the second body paragraph shifts from career success to social attitudes without fully explaining the link. Some references are also confusing, particularly “their wife or brother thinks his sister,” which makes it difficult to identify whose views are being discussed. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the main claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “gender equality,” “basic rights,” “household,” “successful career,” and “achievement.” These choices make the general subject clear. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural expressions reduce precision, such as “women patriachy,” “do all the household,” and “making huge progress in different.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “arguements,” “womens,” and “acheving,” are also noticeable. Aim to learn common collocations and check the form of words when editing. More precise terms such as “domestic responsibilities,” “workplace discrimination,” and “career advancement” would help you explain the issue more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a conditional idea in “if women are able to do any task that can be done by men.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to follow, and errors occur frequently in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction. For example, “Our society have” should use a singular verb, while “she also is able to do it” has awkward word order. The quotation contains several clauses joined without clear punctuation, and the conclusion’s “women should to considered equal” is grammatically incomplete. These problems sometimes make the intended meaning unclear. Practise building accurate sentences around one main idea, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement and verb patterns.

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