Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The place of femal has changed a very nice deal in many socities over the last 50 years. While these socities cannot accept to have achieved gender equality. Yes i am agree with statement. To commence with, ofcore its great to be a women are dependent in todays society and take thier own dicisions. To elaborate it, now womens are deside that what they want or what thier needs in new society wonem are doing job, and handel thier home also make full fill thier dreams. For example, acording to a one study shows that women are capable for thier dreams to complete without to depend others and womens are more educated rather then a men. Thus the result of that its positive affect on rural areas individuals gave accepted that education in significant also for wonems. Furthermore, but some people of this society are not accept that that women have equal right to take thier own disigens. they think that its not good for they siciety. like if womens are wearing a shorts dresses or they are hanging out outside, they peru education its not good they can't accept that wonem are grow equaliy. In other words, they want that wonem live like before last 50 years. In thiere homes and they don't give geneder equality to them like others. they want that femals do agree on society oders. To explicate it, one artical illustrate that society gives more right to men rather then a women. In conclusion, on my opinion womens want gender equality.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position that women’s circumstances have improved but gender equality has not been achieved, especially when you describe women making their own decisions and continuing to face restrictive social attitudes. These points are relevant to the question. However, the position is not consistently clear: the opening says “Yes i am agree with statement,” while the conclusion only says women “want gender equality,” without directly stating whether you agree that society has not achieved it. Several claims, such as the reference to “one study” and “one artical,” are vague and not explained or supported with specific examples. Develop fewer points more fully and connect each example explicitly to the extent of your agreement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an identifiable opening, a discussion of women’s changing roles, a contrasting point about social restrictions, and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic sense of organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded together, and links are sometimes mechanical or confusing. For example, “Furthermore, but” combines contrasting signals, while “Thus the result of that” does not clearly show how the preceding claim leads to the point about rural education. References such as “they” and “that” are also unclear in places. Use distinct paragraphs for each main idea, arrange supporting details in a clear order, and choose linking expressions that accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “gender equality,” “equal right,” “dependent,” and “society,” and you try to express ideas about education, work, and social expectations. However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “femal,” “socities,” “dicisions,” and “peru education.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “a very nice deal” and “women are grow equaliy.” These issues fit a response where vocabulary is minimally adequate but noticeable errors can cause difficulty for the reader. Build a reliable set of topic phrases and check spelling, word forms, and collocations before using them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “While,” “For example,” and “In other words.” This shows some effort to vary sentence structure. However, complex attempts are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. For instance, “now womens are deside that what they want” has problems with the verb form and clause structure, while “women are capable for their dreams to complete” is not grammatically well formed. The opening fragment beginning “While” also needs to be joined to a complete main clause. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then add subordinate clauses and check subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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