Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I agree wirth the given statment that position of womens are changed in many societies in a last few years but are unable to acheive there gender equality

In many societies we can see in lastcouple of years there is big change in women parsonality in various sectors womens are doing double jobs they have a burden of work as well as their households . They are not treating as a mens in socity not getting inoff day offs and paid labour offs In most if the countries mens have more rights than women in differnt pisition Mens percentage is always high in all aspects than women

Mens run most of the governments in all the countries

womens are usually less involved in most

in last few years womens are involvef in all public and private sectores on the badus of their qualifications but there no such progress we can see that can take them equal to mens prefrences are more given to mens

In now days wr can see little change in society for womens they are getting more chance to build there

future .In jobs sector seats are equally divided between mens and womens .more oppertunities are

created for womens in now days womens are able to

acheive good positions on the basis of merits lot of entrance exams are also available for womens to get a chance

In cinclusion we can say that many of the aspects are still present in the society that are not allowing womens to get gender equality

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear from the opening: you agree that women’s status has changed but gender equality has not been achieved. You also give relevant points, including women’s combined work and household responsibilities, men’s greater representation in government, and improved access to jobs and examinations. However, these points are mostly asserted rather than explained or supported with specific examples. The response also gives mixed signals: you say opportunities and seats are now equally divided, but do not clarify whether this is true generally or only in some sectors. Develop two or three main reasons in more depth, explain how they demonstrate continuing inequality, and add a relevant example to make your argument more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable overall shape: an introduction, discussion of continuing disadvantages, a paragraph about recent improvements, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify your general argument. However, paragraphing and progression are uneven. The line “womens are usually less involved in most” is incomplete, and the shift from women’s disadvantages to equally divided job seats is abrupt. Several ideas are placed together without clear links, while transitions such as “In now days” are repeated or awkward. Organise each body paragraph around one clear point, connect the explanation to that point, and use linking phrases to show contrast—for example, between progress in access to jobs and the persistence of unequal treatment.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “gender equality,” “governments,” “qualifications,” “merits,” and “opportunities,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “women,” “men,” and “in now days.” Frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices—such as “parsonality,” “acheive,” “prefrences,” and “paid labour offs”—sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “build there future” and “seats are equally divided.” Work on accurate spelling and common collocations, and choose more precise terms such as “representation,” “career prospects,” and “equal pay” where they fit your meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can usually identify your main point. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence formation, agreement, articles, and verb forms. For example, “they are not treating as a mens” lacks a suitable passive construction, while “there is big change” needs an article and clearer agreement. Several sentences run together without reliable punctuation, as in the discussion of rights and men’s representation, and “womens are involvef” shows an incorrect verb form. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then combine related ideas with conjunctions and check articles, plurals, and punctuation.

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