Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this contemporary world, in many fields women are working in higher position over the past 50 years. But the main thing is community cannot accept to have gender equality. I agree with the given statement and I also give the reason and relevent examples.

To begin with, women are working in every field across the world recent 50 years. According to recent survey around 30% and above women are working now to fulfill their need. For example, in India many women can do work because Indian people party encouraging women and launching new schemes for the women. Moreover, women are also lead the countries for instance, Japan and Italy these both county lead by women. Furthermore, women are now in IT sector, in government higher position and also working in the factory. In addition many women are from home and also they start their own business from home.

On the other hand, but these days some men believe that women can't do anything in their life because they think women are only for the preparing meals and care their child. In this community they think about one woman cannot lead the country. For example, in China mens are can do work anything in your life women are only for husband and grow their children and prepared meal for them.

To conclude, from my point of view women are equally to men because many smart work can only do women and also women are easily handle the lot's of pain but men cannot handle the pain.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear general position—“I agree with the given statement”—and discuss both women’s changing roles and continuing restrictive attitudes. Examples such as women entering government and IT, and the belief that women should only cook and care for children, are relevant to the question. However, the response only partially develops the central issue of whether societies have achieved gender equality: most of the first body paragraph describes women’s employment, while the conclusion shifts to women’s ability to handle pain rather than explaining remaining inequalities. Some claims, including the survey figure and country examples, are not clearly connected to your argument. Develop specific forms of inequality, such as unequal pay or limited leadership opportunities, and explain how each supports your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

Your response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Paragraphing also separates women’s progress from continuing traditional attitudes, and signposts such as “To begin with” and “On the other hand” help indicate a change in focus. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first moves rapidly from a survey claim to India, women leaders, IT, factories and home businesses without explaining how these points build one argument. “On the other hand, but” uses two contrasting signals together, and references such as “these both county” make it difficult to identify the intended examples. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, then explain and illustrate it; use fewer, more precise linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “gender equality,” “higher position,” “government” and “IT sector,” so the reader can identify the subject of your argument. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to follow. For example, “women are working in higher position” does not clearly express the change in their status, while “Indian people party encouraging women” is hard to interpret. Phrases such as “smart work can only do women” and “handle the lot’s of pain” are also unclear or unnatural. Build a more precise vocabulary for equality and employment, and check collocations and word forms. The suggestions below offer alternatives that fit your intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses introduced by “because” and “that,” as in “some men believe that women can't do anything in their life.” This shows an effort to express reasons and viewpoints, but the range remains limited and errors are frequent enough to make several sentences difficult to understand. Examples include “women are also lead the countries,” “men are can do work,” and “women are equally to men.” There are also problems with agreement and sentence construction, such as “these both county lead by women,” as well as inconsistent control of articles and plurals. Practise accurate simple sentence patterns first, then add subordinate clauses, checking verb forms and subject–verb agreement in each sentence.

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