Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Today, most of the countries force accept the rule of women independance because of there positions in the welfare of society but these societies cannot claim to achieved the gender equality. From my perstective, the women are able to protect your self nevertheless, they also are not able to fulfil any desire except a men. So, i am completely disagree with the equility of women and men.

Women are able to do all the works in their life but in the includence of men. They are not able to protect there life and honor from this world. There are many case of rape and harassment in all our the the world which is continously increasing become most of the women think that they are independent. Although the women are strong, they are not able to fight against this cruel world alone. For example, what happen if a women is harrass by someone they nned a men at that time who protect them in sach a situation.

The Islam says that the education is compulsory for every men and women and it is also a basic right of everyone however, it also force them to cover their body and also difine that the men is more stronger then the women. Although women are not strong, it has brothers, father and husband to protect it. Not only in islam all the holy religion ask their follower to hide their women from other because they are a source of honor for every men.

In conclusion, women and men are not equal the women are the honor and the men are the protectors of this. So, women should want to accept this qutation and enjoy there life in dependence of their males.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that you disagree with gender equality, and you include reasons related to safety and religious beliefs. However, the response only partially addresses the question because it does not explain in a balanced or sufficiently developed way why societies have not achieved equality after women’s positions changed. The claim that women need men for protection is repeated, but examples such as rape and harassment are asserted rather than explained or supported. The discussion of education and religious teachings is relevant to your position, yet its connection to equality in society remains unclear. To strengthen the response, define what equality means in practical terms and develop specific examples about areas such as work, education, or decision-making.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The paragraphs broadly group ideas about safety and religion, and linking expressions such as “Although,” “For example,” and “In conclusion” help signal relationships. However, progression is limited because the same idea—that women need male protection—returns several times without adding a distinct point. Some connections are difficult to follow, particularly the shift from women’s education to religious rules about covering their bodies and men’s strength. References such as “this” and “it” are not always clear. Organise each body paragraph around one distinct reason, then explain how it supports your position, using clearer references and fewer repeated claims.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “gender equality,” “independent,” “harassment,” “compulsory,” and “basic right.” This gives the reader a general sense of your subject and viewpoint. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make parts difficult to understand, such as “force accept,” “includence,” “qutation,” and “dependence” where you appear to mean “dependence on” or reliance. Phrases such as “protect their life and honor from this world” are also unclear or unnatural. Build a more precise set of expressions for discussing equality, safety, and social roles, and check spelling and collocations. For example, use “achieve gender equality” and “rely on men for protection” rather than less natural combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “although” and “because.” This shows some effort to connect ideas rather than relying only on short sentences. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, so the reader sometimes has to work to understand the meaning. Examples include “these societies cannot claim to achieved,” “the women are able to protect your self,” and “what happen if a women is harrass.” Subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, pronouns, and sentence boundaries need more consistent control. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly formed subordinate clause, and proofread for agreement and verb tense before adding further complexity.

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