Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In recent years, position of females in numerous societies over the past half of the decade has become a subject of considerable dabate. Some indiviuals support this view, while other disagree. Form my perspective , I partially agree with this statement beacause women are independent as compared to past and women are more educat

To begin with, why i agree with this statement.There are several factors. First and foremost,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response begins to address the question by stating, “I partially agree,” and gives two relevant reasons: women are more independent and better educated than in the past. However, these points are not explained or supported, and the essay does not develop a clear argument about why societies still have not achieved gender equality. The sentence “To begin with, why i agree with this statement” introduces a point but is left unfinished, so the reader cannot follow the reasoning. The response also falls substantially short of the required 250 words. To improve, explain both sides of your position, use specific examples, and complete a conclusion that directly answers the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening introduces the topic and opinion, followed by a paragraph beginning “To begin with.” The phrases “Some individuals support this view” and “First and foremost” also signal a contrast and a developing point. However, the response ends before a logical progression is established: “First and foremost,” is not followed by an idea, and there is no developed body or conclusion. The opening’s contrast between other people’s views and your own is not connected to a clear line of argument. Build distinct paragraphs around your reasons, explain each point before moving on, and use linking expressions to show how the ideas relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response shows some relevant topic vocabulary, including “position of females,” “societies,” “independent,” and “educated,” and “considerable” is an attempt at a more formal descriptive word. However, the range is too limited to express the argument in detail, and several spelling errors—“dabate,” “indiviuals,” and “beacause”—reduce accuracy. Some phrasing is also imprecise: “over the past half of the decade” does not clearly convey the intended 50-year period, while “position of females” is less natural in this context than “status of women.” Develop a wider set of terms for equality and social change, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The short response includes a few simple sentence patterns and an attempt at a complex sentence: “I partially agree with this statement because women are independent as compared to past and women are more educated.” This shows an emerging ability to connect reasons, but the range is narrow and control is inconsistent. Articles are missing in “position of females” and “as compared to past”; the opening also has awkward sentence boundaries, as in “To begin with, why i agree with this statement.There are several factors.” The final word, “educat,” leaves the sentence incomplete, and the next sentence fragment, “First and foremost,” is unfinished. Practise complete sentences, accurate articles, and varied structures, then proofread punctuation and capitalisation.

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