Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter

• explain what you are currently doing
• describe your suitability for this area of work
• say when you can attend an interview.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Hello good evening

Iam shankar lall a software engineering undergraduate currently enrolled in part 2.hope that you are doing well.As I had seen the news paper today and saw some empty vacant as waiter waitress at your restaurant. I have pactisized me to do advertisement on add.As a software engineer I have been doing marketing course on side and practise it through my journey continuing in my feild I have built strong enough strategic s in marketing area and domne some well branded adds on national level for software feild companies Which I had posted on my social accounts Instagram and Facebook whith some biggest collabrating personality brand.I above I have given link where you can see my work . I humbly requesting for this advertise as responsibility for better servives for. your restaurant that probably might runs on large scale I will do my best knowledge and hardwawok to betterment of business development .your choice Iwill highly thankful consideration and appreciating for.looking forward for your kind hiring response.

name: Shankar lall

email :[redacted email]

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You make an attempt to apply for the advertised waiter/waitress position and give some information about your current studies as a software engineering undergraduate. You also mention marketing experience and provide a link to your work, which offers some evidence of relevant skills. However, the response does not clearly explain why these skills make you suitable for restaurant service, and the focus on advertising and software companies is only indirectly relevant. Most importantly, you do not say when you are available to attend an interview. The request for the job is also difficult to identify because the wording is unclear. Address each bullet directly, including a specific interview time, and explain customer-service skills or experience.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a recognisable attempt to organise the response as an application, moving from your current studies to your experience and then to a request for consideration. However, nearly all the information is presented in one long, crowded paragraph, so the reader has difficulty following the progression. Connections between ideas are often unclear, as in the shift from being a software engineering student to describing marketing work and then requesting a waiter position. The opening and closing are also not clearly separated from the main message. Use short paragraphs for your purpose, current situation and suitability, and interview availability; then connect each point with simple, accurate transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some vocabulary beyond basic everyday language, including “undergraduate,” “strategic,” “collaborating,” and “national level,” and you try to describe your work and contribution to the restaurant. However, inaccurate word choice, spelling and collocation frequently make the message difficult to understand. Examples include “empty vacant,” “pactisized,” “well branded adds,” and “better servives.” Some expressions, such as “strategic s in marketing area,” are incomplete or unclear. Choose familiar, precise language that fits a job application rather than using phrases whose meaning is uncertain. Proofreading spelling and using standard employment vocabulary would make your relevant experience easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine ideas in longer sentences, for example when describing your studies and marketing experience, and the reader can identify some basic information. However, sentence boundaries and grammatical relationships are often unclear. The opening, “Iam shankar lall a software engineering undergraduate currently enrolled in part 2.hope that you are doing well,” lacks clear sentence structure and punctuation. Other examples include “I humbly requesting” and “I will do my best knowledge,” where the verb patterns are incomplete or inaccurate. Capitalisation, spacing and punctuation are also inconsistent. Build the letter with complete, shorter sentences first, checking subject–verb forms and articles, then add a few longer sentences once those patterns are secure.

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