Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter

• explain what you are currently doing
• describe your suitability for this area of work
• say when you can attend an interview.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Manager,

Hope you are fine!

I have seen your advertisement in local newspaper of jobs for waiters and waitresses which get my attention to words an i am also intrested in this desigenation because I am currently working as a waiter in Mc Donals from last 5 years and my KPI,s in this resturent is to serve meals to customers and atract them to our new deals and make there mind for them but my suitable area of work is to entertain them and also in cash handle because I am very good in numbers and i will attend interview when you are free you can just make a call to and I will be their in next half an hour your office is very near to my home town and i am doing night shift in my previuse work place so I am avaible any time in your office timings.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main points by explaining that you work as a waiter, describing customer service and cash-handling experience, and saying you are available for an interview. The five years at McDonald’s and your night-shift schedule are relevant details. However, some information is unclear or insufficiently developed: “my KPI’s … is to serve meals” does not clearly explain your responsibilities, and “I will attend interview when you are free” does not give a definite time or suggest a clear arrangement. The letter also lacks a closing and a direct request to be considered for the position. Make each required point explicit and provide a specific interview window to make the application more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broadly sensible order: it refers to the advertisement, gives work experience and suitability, then discusses interview availability. However, nearly all the information is placed in one long paragraph and joined with repeated “and” and “because,” so the reader has to work to identify where one point ends and another begins. The shift from job duties to personal strengths and then to availability is not clearly signposted. Use separate paragraphs for your application and experience, and for interview arrangements, with a clear closing. Shorter sentences and linking phrases such as “In my current role” and “Regarding an interview” would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant employment vocabulary, including “advertisement,” “customers,” “deals,” “cash handle,” and “night shift,” which helps communicate your experience. However, the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “desigenation,” “resturent,” and “attract them to our new deals.” “KPI’s” is also not a natural way to introduce routine waiter duties in this letter. Choose precise, conventional expressions for customer service and handling payments, and check spelling carefully. More accurate vocabulary would help you describe your strengths professionally without changing the relevant content.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas using clauses such as “because I am currently working…” and “so I am available…,” but the response relies mainly on one extended sentence, and the complex structure becomes difficult to control. There are frequent errors in sentence boundaries, verb forms, agreement, and articles. For example, “I have seen your advertisement … which get my attention” has an incorrect verb form, while “my KPI’s … is” has a subject–verb agreement problem. The phrase “I will attend interview” also needs an article or plural form. Use shorter sentences and practise accurate past and present forms, agreement, and article use; this will make your meaning clearer.

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