Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter

• explain what you are currently doing
• describe your suitability for this area of work
• say when you can attend an interview.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

To whom it may concern,

I am Md Golam Sharoar Saymum, writing to you after reading your advertisement on the local newspaper which states that you are hiring waiters. I would love to apply for the position of waiter. I am currently working at another restaurant and it's very far from my home. I have 2 years of experience on this. I have been looking for an opportunity nearby and then I came across your advertisement.

I would love to mention that I am very suitable for this position, I am working really well at my current working place and if you contact my manager he will certainly confirm that. Your place is nearby and I will never get tired due to journey to the place and it will have my full concentration and happy mood that customers seek in a waiter. I would love to present myself as the perfect candidate.

Since, my manager knows about my hardship, they are are also informed that I am looking for a new job and I can quit the current one at any time. So, I therefore request for an interview at your convinience.

Sincerely yours,

Saymum

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the three requested points: you explain that you currently work at another restaurant, give two years’ experience and describe why the nearby location appeals to you, then request an interview. However, suitability is asserted more than demonstrated: “I am working really well” and “the perfect candidate” would be more convincing with specific examples, such as customer-service skills, reliability or handling busy shifts. Interview availability is also unclear; saying you can leave your current job “at any time” does not tell the restaurant when you can attend. Give a definite range of days or times and develop your relevant experience to make the application more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement, moving from the application and current work to suitability and then the interview request. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these stages, and phrases such as “I am currently” and “Since” signal relationships between ideas. Some connections are less clear or mechanical, however. The long sentence beginning “Your place is nearby” joins several ideas, while “Since, my manager knows about my hardship” does not clearly explain how this leads to the interview request. The reference in “they are also informed” is also unclear after mentioning “my manager.” Use shorter, more logically linked sentences and make each paragraph’s purpose explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the purpose of an application, including “advertisement,” “position,” “experience” and “customers.” Some wording is repetitive or imprecise, which limits the range and naturalness of the letter. For example, “working at another restaurant” and “current working place” repeat the same idea, while “hardship” does not clearly describe the difficulty of travelling a long distance. “Happy mood that customers seek” is also an awkward way to express a service quality. Choose more precise employment and customer-service language, and check spelling in “convinience.” More natural collocations would make your suitability sound clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and longer structures, and the main message remains understandable. However, some sentence structures and punctuation need more control. In “I am very suitable for this position, I am working really well,” two independent clauses are joined with a comma; use a full stop or a conjunction. “Since, my manager knows” has an unnecessary comma after the opening conjunction, and “they are are also informed” repeats the verb and has unclear agreement with the singular “manager.” The phrase “I have 2 years of experience on this” also uses an unsuitable preposition. Review clause boundaries, agreement and sentence punctuation, then vary sentence forms while keeping each idea grammatically complete.

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