Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter
- explain what you are currently doing
- describe your suitability for this area of work
- say when you can attend an interview.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
To HR manager,
Sir, i hope you are doing well. Yesterday , i saw your hiring ad in the newspaper. You are looking for waiters and waitresses. I am working in a nearby sushi restaurant. I have 4 year of experience in the hospitality field. My designation is server in that restaurant.
I have all the essential qualities which are required to be a perfect waiter. I am very punctual, hardworking person who have smile on the face. I am very well aware to all rules and guidelines of food ministry. I can work in all the harsh condition. Morever, I can work as fryer in the kitchen .I am very polite person so, You will not get any complain from customers. I am expecting 16$ per hour .I will also be available for late shifts .
Sunday would be perfect for interview . If you would hire me , I will be valuable for you bussiness.
Yours sincerely ,
behzad ali
Contact No. [redacted phone]
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response addresses all three bullet points in the prompt: current employment, suitability, and interview availability. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter of application. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention your experience, you could have elaborated more on specific tasks you perform at your current restaurant to better demonstrate your suitability. The mention of salary expectations is a bit abrupt and could be framed more professionally. Overall, the task is fulfilled, but the content lacks the depth required for a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Transitions like 'Morever' (which is misspelled) and 'If you would hire me' are basic. The flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect your experience to the requirements of the job. Paragraphing is present, but the transition between the introduction and the body could be smoother.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You use a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, such as 'hospitality field', 'punctual', and 'guidelines'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'harsh condition' (should be 'demanding conditions') and 'bussiness' (spelling error). The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and sophistication expected at higher levels. To improve, focus on using more professional collocations related to the service industry.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'i saw' (capitalization), '4 year of experience' (should be 'years'), 'who have smile' (should be 'who has a smile'), and 'aware to' (should be 'aware of'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. You should focus on subject-verb agreement and basic article usage.
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