Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter
- explain what you are currently doing
- describe your suitability for this area of work
- say when you can attend an interview.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Hello i am Arslan Ahmed belongs from yours city i am looking for job and saw your restaurant in newspaper harring a waiters.
Hello and good morning i am currently job in cafe but i saw your add in newspaper restaurant. So i had two years of expiries as a waiter and your restaurant is near by me which is i come on time which gives by you.
In currently i work for cafe also cafe is long designation from me so that's why i will leave that cafe's job and in this problem spend more time on road that i can't go work on time
In this week i will free form that cafe and applying for job in your restaurant i will come on this week on monday 9 o'clock for interview so let me know on emali (arslanahmed342gmil.com) conant number is [redacted phone] i am waiting for your repose.
Regards:Arslan Ahmed
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all three bullet points of the task: explaining current employment, describing suitability, and suggesting an interview time. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited and repetitive. For instance, the explanation of why you are leaving your current job is somewhat confusing and lacks professional tone. While the task requirements are met, the content is underdeveloped and lacks the formal register expected in a job application letter. To improve, you should focus on expanding your points with more professional language and ensuring the purpose of each paragraph is clearly communicated to the employer.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter lacks a clear structure and logical progression. There is no formal salutation or proper paragraphing, which makes the text appear as a single, disjointed block. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'and' and 'so' to link ideas. The transition between your current job and your suitability is abrupt. To achieve a higher score, you must use clear paragraph breaks for each section of the letter and employ a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'therefore') to connect your ideas more smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is very basic and often inaccurate, which hinders the professional tone required for a job application. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'harring' for hiring, 'expiries' for experience, 'emali' for email, 'conant' for contact) and word choice issues, such as 'long designation' to describe distance. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express your suitability for the role effectively. You should focus on learning common collocations related to employment and professional correspondence to improve your ability to convey information accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are significant issues with sentence structure, verb tense consistency, and punctuation. For example, 'I am currently job in cafe' is grammatically incorrect, and the sentence 'your restaurant is near by me which is i come on time which gives by you' is very difficult to follow. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the basic sentences often contain errors in subject-verb agreement and word order. Improving your control over basic sentence construction and proofreading for punctuation errors is essential.
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