Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter

• explain what you are currently doing
• describe your suitability for this area of work
• say when you can attend an interview.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

sir i hope that you are doing good i am a current student of a university and now i am on my summer break and i need to work in a restaurant for my experience and i also need money ,i need very hardly i also have a experience before so i think that i am perfectly good for this work i am a educated person so i treated customer i a very good way so i do my job with full of my responsibility treated person ina good way so i hope if i would be selected yours resturant moves very good so sir kindly give me a date due to which i can come to u for my interview and also i can tell you more things about myself so sir i hope i would be selected just waiting for your kind and early response. cv and resume can be provided on a demand

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all three bullet points: current status, suitability, and interview availability. However, the development of these ideas is quite basic. For instance, the explanation of suitability is repetitive, stating 'I am an educated person' and 'I treated customer in a very good way' without providing specific examples of relevant skills or past experience. The tone is also inconsistent with a formal job application, appearing overly casual and lacking the professional structure expected in a letter. While the task requirements are met, the lack of depth and professional register limits the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks paragraphing, which is essential for a formal letter. The text is presented as a single block, making it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices; the sentences are mostly linked by 'and' or run-on structures, such as 'I am a student... and I need to work... and I also need money'. The absence of formal salutations and sign-offs further impacts the coherence of the letter format. To improve, you should use clear paragraph breaks for each point and employ transition words like 'Furthermore', 'Consequently', or 'In addition' to connect your ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'very good way' and 'very good' are used multiple times, which indicates a restricted range. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'I need very hardly' (instead of 'I am in urgent need') and 'on a demand' (instead of 'upon request'). The language is informal and lacks the precision required for a professional application. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more specific professional terminology related to the hospitality industry and avoid overusing basic adjectives.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles, incorrect verb tenses, and significant punctuation issues. The entire text is essentially one long run-on sentence with minimal capitalization or full stops. For example, 'I treated customer i a very good way' contains errors in pluralization, prepositions, and spelling. There is almost no use of complex sentence structures; the writing relies on simple, repetitive clauses. The lack of proper sentence boundaries and consistent errors in basic grammar significantly impede the flow and clarity of the message.

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