Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter

• explain what you are currently doing
• describe your suitability for this area of work
• say when you can attend an interview.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

10th August,2026

Bogura, Bangladesh

Respected Owner,

I would like to offer myself as a candidate for the post of waitress in your restaurent. Recently I am working as a part time waitress in another restaurent. I would like have a full time job. I can maintain friendly , joyous environment with the customers. I can work under pressure. So if the customers through tantrums over small things ,I can also keep a blind eye. I can also keep their attitude on line. I am fast at serving the customers. I have got an award for my fast movement from my recent workplace. My part time starts from around 5.30 in the evening and I don't have any other work in the morning, so I can attend interview in the morning. I would okay with any time to be honest . I hope you will call me for interview.

Sincerely yours,

Progga

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: your current employment, your suitability, and your availability for an interview. However, the tone is inconsistent for a formal job application. Phrases like 'keep a blind eye' and 'keep their attitude on line' are informal and slightly aggressive, which does not reflect the professional standard expected in a formal letter. While the ideas are relevant, they lack the professional polish required for a higher band. To improve, ensure your language remains formal and polite throughout, focusing on professional attributes rather than how you handle difficult customers in a confrontational manner.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter follows a basic logical progression, moving from the purpose of the letter to your experience and finally to your availability. However, the paragraphing is non-existent; the entire body is written as one block of text. Using clear paragraph breaks between the introduction, the body (experience/suitability), and the conclusion would significantly improve the structure. Additionally, the use of cohesive devices is limited. You rely on simple sentence structures, which makes the flow feel somewhat mechanical. Incorporating linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'moreover' would help connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and formal register required for a business letter. There are several spelling errors, such as 'restaurent' (restaurant), and awkward phrasing like 'offer myself as a candidate' (better: 'apply for the position') and 'through tantrums' (should be 'throw tantrums'). The phrase 'keep a blind eye' is an idiom that is not appropriate for a formal application. To reach a higher band, focus on using more professional collocations and ensure accurate spelling of basic workplace-related terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

You use a mix of simple sentences, but there is a lack of complex structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'Recently I am working' (should be 'I am currently working') and 'I would okay with' (missing the verb 'be'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after commas. While your meaning is generally clear, the frequent minor errors and the limited variety of sentence structures prevent a higher score. Try to incorporate more complex sentences using relative clauses or conditional structures to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.

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